Wednesday, September 22, 2010

half empty
















glass scratched blue
breaks the silence of
unread lines on a blank page.....
my mind turns a corner....
and there is the road I was
looking for....I have no idea
where it will take me...
do I care? I ask Myself.   unable to get
a straight answer I go on alone..
leaving you standing holding
glass half empty..

bkmackenzie
copyrighted 2010

photo by Leslie Grace Photography

31 comments:

  1. hope u find your answers soon. life's so critical at times. wonderful work!

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  2. leaving you standing holding
    glass half empty..wow, that one line says so much. I REALLY like this a lot!

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  3. lots of questions in life..still searching for answer ..you are right..life is an unsolved puzzle

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  4. "Do I care?" That says so much to me.

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  5. Wow, this says a lot more than it is saying :)
    Well done!

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  6. curious...you capitalized Myself
    says a lot if intentional
    and everything in a poem is intentional isn't it
    called craft
    wonderful

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  7. Reminds me very much of a lisa Zaran poem, the name of which escapes me just now. Evokes a similiar response in me.

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  8. oh, holding the glass half empty...tight close...too many miss the close but you nailed it...

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  9. thank you all....I was wondering how many got the meaning behind the piece...the first line came to me about two weeks ago when we were driving....bkm

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  10. I notice you labeled your poem as Random and if so, the unexpected spawn of one's Muse often invokes the strongest writing; at least that is my experience. To tread the path of chance without reservation. Such eloquence in a single piece.

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  11. Am expecting you to get a glass half full at the end of your little trip hopefully the one left behind gets it and follows you or you find another... either way you're done...lovely bkm.

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  12. Sorry that is not it....I should have asked everyone to give there take on it...bkm

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  13. I hope they catch up! Thanks for stopping by.

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  14. "creating a palette of mood" Ooooh so romantic. I actually have a Queen Anne vanity it became mine when my mother passed so I could envision it throughout the poem!

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  15. Oh I love the touch of cynicism that accents the beauty of your words-- nicely done!

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  16. adventurous poem,
    the ending leaves readers lingering...
    well captured uncertainty of life.

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  17. Sometimes it's hard to leave someone behind, other times we need to run. I enjoyed your writing. :))

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  18. Certainly does bring us a surprise or two as we travel down the road. This is a great poem.

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  19. I like this poem very much... "my mind turns a corner..." and finding the looked-for road and following on the instant - love the sentiment expressed and the expression itself.

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  20. I really enjoyed the read...thanks for linking with Potluck!! Have a great week ahead my friend xx

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  21. Amazingly written, glad to have you in for Poetry Potluck =P

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  22. These lines are especially poignant to me:

    >>> unread lines on a blank page.....
    >>> my mind turns a corner....

    My Monday Poetry Potluck: Fibonacci.

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  23. This made me think of creative ideas abandoned and new ones explored...

    I loved the flow...

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  24. Leaving the half-empty glass. Perfect.

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  25. This is a satisfying poem! Loaded with tension, and yet ... it concludes triumphantly for the narrator. So well done. Wow!

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  26. sometimes, the half empty glass just needs to be left!

    My Potluck Poem

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  27. glass scratched blue.

    economical and masterful use of words throughout. amazing poem.

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  28. Sometimes there's not much else you can do...I like!

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  29. Beautiful journey of thought... liked the way you left yourself alone with the glass... Very well said..

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/
    Connect with me at Twitter @VerseEveryDay

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  30. Well done ... I like the whole poem, but the last lines are "punch" lines, so to speak. Nice.

    Happy potluck, bkm.

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