Tuesday, September 21, 2010

Do Not Linger....




do not linger long in the meadow
as it has gone to seed, the dance of summer
how replaced by shadow - leaves little time
with a course that now deceives, the heart
of what may not last, love or time or its inner need
collecting its laughter as you linger awaiting a chilling sing
that over this temple once charmed with flower....the
winds of winter soon shall ring  - the frost,  its hour
of vespers and prayer - to silence its power does bring
suspending the meadow only safe passage
to fox and snowy white hare,  that carry the secrets
to the season of promise found in the moonlight and clear night air...

do not linger long in the meadow - as autumn has laid its hand
stilling the heart and its wild flower as winter dresses to take its stand....

bkmackenzie
copyrightd 2010

Posted for One Shot Wednesday - Where Poets and Writers Meet..
and Thursday Think Tank.(Autumn)..at Poets United

54 comments:

  1. nice. autumn has laid its hand and winter dresses....great personification...and this is the perfect time of year for me, but if i linger, come find me before i freeze...smiles.

    nice one shot!

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  2. ah yes - autumn…a beautiful season which always leaves me melancholic in a way….love especially the line..who carry the secrets through the season of promise found in moonlight and clear nights air…beautiful!

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  3. Great piece to introduce us to the fall to come...

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  4. You have a way with subtle rhyme in this piece I like very much. And I just noticed your quote to my right, "When I dream in autumn, I only dream in Robert Frost." You have definitely resurrected his voice in this one, painting the upcoming season with beautiful imagery. Pure poetry.

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  5. "do not linger long in the meadow - as autumn has laid its hand
    stilling the heart and its wild flower as winter dresses to take its stand...."

    I just love it!!

    loveNlight
    Gabi

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  6. What a beautiful poem. You have such great images in this. I love the the image of the fox and snowy white hare.

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  7. you made me fall in love with autumn..all over again..:) love the imagery, feeling the gentle breeze on my face now..awesome one shot!

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  8. "do not linger long in the meadow" is a lovely lyrical line. The poem reads like a psalm.

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  9. Another fall poem. Tis the season, I suppose and it brings out a beauty all its own. Your poem captures the changing of the seasons well BKM

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  10. - to silence its power does bring
    suspending the meadow only safe passage
    to fox and snowy white hare, that carry the secrets
    to the season of promise found in the moonlight and clear night air...
    ...

    love it,
    beautifully said.

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  11. Great Autumn poem. Love the imagery :)

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  12. Ahhhh beautiful, I can think of Autumn in any season and smile of the beauty in thought, as I can in these wonderful words. Breathtaking imagery :)

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  13. Beautiful imagery. The personification here seems like a dramatis personae with the earth and seasons the characters in the drama. Well written. Thanks, Gay (@beachanny)

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  14. Autumn is my favorite season, and you've captured the feelings and emotions of it nicely!

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  15. I love the urgency in this. You can just feel the fall quickly taking over through your words. My favorite line was "winter dresses"...wow!

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  16. A beautiful sense of loss. Love how the lines flow together. Imagery and feeling are balanced—read it a few times... Deep
    cheers

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  17. What a gorgeous poem, bkm. As beautiful as the season itself...

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  18. Great words on the transition. An air of mystery about it.

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  19. Lovely poem and imagery bkm and makes you open your arms wide to welcome the Autumn season. My favorite lines..

    'do not linger long in the meadow
    as it has gone to seed, the dance of summer
    how replaced by shadow - leaves little time
    with a course that now deceives, the heart'

    Great oneshot dear~

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  20. Beautiful poem.I will have to read it a couple more times then star it. :) River

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  21. Beautifully said... and I enjoyed the words "do not linger long in the meadow
    as it has gone to seed,"

    And in the end you chose to close with the verse in a different way.... "do not linger long in the meadow - as autumn has laid its hand
    stilling the heart..."

    I liked this so much.. thanks for sharing...

    I was wondering if the "how" in the line " how replaced by shadow - leaves.." is "how" or is it a "now"


    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    Connect with me on Twitter at @VerseEveryDay to read one verse everyday on life, love and longing...

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  22. The last two lines are poetry gold. Great write. Thanks for sharing. Love and Light, Sender

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  23. beautiful, bkm. I am def. a lingerer though, i love the transition from summer to fall.

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  24. Your poem is beautiful, and I hear the sigh of melancholy with the changing of seasons, where winter is near.
    "as autumn has laid its hand
    stilling the heart and its wild flower as winter dresses to take its stand...."
    Lovely,

    Joanny
    http://thedowsersdaughter.blogspot.com/

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  25. Autumn leaves the door open
    And winter creeps in

    As usual, so lovely bkm

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  26. I love this one! So many wonderful ideas and images!

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  27. I'm hoping Autumn will take a few curtain calls before Winter takes the stage.

    Nice One Shot!

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  28. This is lovely -- all those images of autmun come to reflect life, or a life.

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  29. Love those Autumn shades. Nice OS.

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  30. hi bkm...loved the way this was written so that the rhyme kept coming in..a beautiful write..cheers pete

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  31. The idea of the slow end to summer's warmth is so beautiful, especially since we've still got an Indian Summer going on around here. Found your poem through 1SW and loved it. Very evocative of the beginning of the end of the season. Sensual symbolism makes for wonderful reading.

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  32. Wonderful take on the prompt! =)

    -Weasel

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  33. I liked 'the dance of summer now replaced by shadow.' Well written autumn poem.

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  34. Bkm i this this is one of my favorites of yours...it is breathtaking and the imagery is amazing so many wonderful lines in this one!!
    :-)

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  35. I love the imagery, and the rhyme and metre are quite wonderful. Beautiful flow of words - poetry indeed!

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  36. Thanks for the visit,
    you are super kind.

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  37. Lovely piece of writing bkm.

    "...as it has gone to seed, the dance of summer
    how replaced by shadow..."

    Describes me in my autumn years.lol

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  38. The images are outstanding! Priceless poem!

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  39. I like "do not linger too long in the meadow. Fall tempts lingering too long.

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  40. the true thrill of autumn.. very wonderfully penned!

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  41. I loved it all and the last two lines were just wonderful!

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  42. the winds of winter soon shall ring - the frost
    .....very nice lines..u r truly creative

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  43. Wonderful evocation of the passing season.

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  44. I love rhythm of this poem, and the images in paints. If only winter's clean white dress didn't get so dirty long before her dance was done.

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  45. This poem is achingly beautiful, evoking the mix of loss and rebirth that change brings to our lives. The last two lines are simply stunning....

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  46. Beautifully done. I enjoyed reading and getting the visuals. The ending is powerful..wintering getting dressed to take a stand. Love it!

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  47. Love this, that carried the secrets to the season!
    So many senses stimulated, really beautiful~

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  48. Beautiful and lovely imagery within the poem :D~ wonderful flow toward Autumn as well:3~

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  49. Oh, how I love autumn. And this piece. Spectacular!

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