Saturday, July 30, 2011

inception





i.

i am in a room
with a view on three sides
up against a wall
on the other
i hold a
fear of falling
so i
jump

ii.

the hallway
is eternal and deliberate
i am dressed
as an admiral
decorated
i wear slacks navy blue
i cannot
swim

iii.

there is a
woman, she walks
past me
nods her head
she conveys a message
i am sworn
to keep
righteously unraveled

iv.

time stops
its march forward
its face looks
to me for help, i have
forgotten
how to get home
i go to my
room

bkmackenzie
copyrighted 2011


12 comments:

  1. Hate to play baseball in their yard. My first thought was this is a nun in a convent of some sort.

    there is a
    woman, she walks
    past me
    nods her head
    she conveys a message
    i am sworn
    to keep
    righteous

    I had no second thought except to admire your dreams, imagination, and inspired wordings. REALLY!

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  2. thanks Steve...the dream world is such a great place to visit...will be going back there in very soon...bkm

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  3. Barbara,

    I really like this abruptness, the surrealism!

    Trulyfool

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  4. yeah i was feeling the dream nature...what does it mean perhaps that is for you only...nice detail though...

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  5. I like the dream quality, and waking life is like that sometimes. I really like that the face of "time" looks to you for help! That is very nice!

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  6. Reading your poem made me remember how I felt while watching Inception. Vivid descriptions, hazy feeling.

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  7. Made me visualize Hotel California.

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  8. I want a room with windows like that...

    You have written with such a light surrealistic touch, which invited us to picture the world from a slightly skewed angle...Thank you for that.

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  9. I love the cool room of windows! Loved the poem too, especially the final stanza.

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  10. I felt this as a madhouse... Where they have given you so many pills you have forgotten who you really are.... or altzeimer (')

    Anyway- it's brilliant, BKM

    :-)

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  11. To me, I felt that this persona was living dual realities - one she sees and she she feels! The one she sees may exist but she tends to cast it aside as of no place in her feeling world! A fascinating sense of perspectives of one condition!

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  12. nice - you really nailed the tone for this one..good one bkm.

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