Saturday, July 30, 2011

inception





i.

i am in a room
with a view on three sides
up against a wall
on the other
i hold a
fear of falling
so i
jump

ii.

the hallway
is eternal and deliberate
i am dressed
as an admiral
decorated
i wear slacks navy blue
i cannot
swim

iii.

there is a
woman, she walks
past me
nods her head
she conveys a message
i am sworn
to keep
righteously unraveled

iv.

time stops
its march forward
its face looks
to me for help, i have
forgotten
how to get home
i go to my
room

bkmackenzie
copyrighted 2011


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12 comments:

  1. steveroniJuly 30, 2011 at 10:22 PM

    Hate to play baseball in their yard. My first thought was this is a nun in a convent of some sort.

    there is a
    woman, she walks
    past me
    nods her head
    she conveys a message
    i am sworn
    to keep
    righteous

    I had no second thought except to admire your dreams, imagination, and inspired wordings. REALLY!

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  2. signed...bkmJuly 30, 2011 at 10:29 PM

    thanks Steve...the dream world is such a great place to visit...will be going back there in very soon...bkm

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  3. TrulyfoolJuly 30, 2011 at 10:56 PM

    Barbara,

    I really like this abruptness, the surrealism!

    Trulyfool

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  4. Brian MillerJuly 31, 2011 at 4:28 AM

    yeah i was feeling the dream nature...what does it mean perhaps that is for you only...nice detail though...

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  5. annell4July 31, 2011 at 6:51 AM

    I like the dream quality, and waking life is like that sometimes. I really like that the face of "time" looks to you for help! That is very nice!

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  6. AizaJuly 31, 2011 at 7:16 AM

    Reading your poem made me remember how I felt while watching Inception. Vivid descriptions, hazy feeling.

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  7. AnonymousJuly 31, 2011 at 7:30 AM

    Made me visualize Hotel California.

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  8. Kerry O'ConnorJuly 31, 2011 at 9:23 AM

    I want a room with windows like that...

    You have written with such a light surrealistic touch, which invited us to picture the world from a slightly skewed angle...Thank you for that.

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  9. Sherry Blue SkyJuly 31, 2011 at 12:59 PM

    I love the cool room of windows! Loved the poem too, especially the final stanza.

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  10. Dulçe ♥July 31, 2011 at 3:06 PM

    I felt this as a madhouse... Where they have given you so many pills you have forgotten who you really are.... or altzeimer (')

    Anyway- it's brilliant, BKM

    :-)

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  11. Gemma WisemanJuly 31, 2011 at 6:27 PM

    To me, I felt that this persona was living dual realities - one she sees and she she feels! The one she sees may exist but she tends to cast it aside as of no place in her feeling world! A fascinating sense of perspectives of one condition!

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  12. Brother OllieJuly 31, 2011 at 7:34 PM

    nice - you really nailed the tone for this one..good one bkm.

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