Thursday, September 16, 2010

intent....


Magpie Tales #32

the grains of sands flicker
as they always do, when you walk through the door
is it just the time of day, or
more
the intent of your visit
that produces such spark
whatever,
let it not matter
the sands pass quickly
and soon
it will be
dark....

bkmackenzie
2010

32 comments:

  1. Dear bkm: This excellent romantic poem is so subtle and persuasive in a positively energized way and yet at the same time so foreboding of gloom which is so obviouslylooming and hence corruptible. ONe wants to take in the "intent of your visit" with the fullest and sensitive gusto before the sands of time run out! Let's hope the sands hold on for at least a good night's kiss!Great atmosphere! So romantic!

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  2. Oh, so nice. I love it....it even has a feeling of time.

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  3. so we need to move quick before the sands run out...smiles. nice verse...

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  4. Excellent poem. It has such a sense of urgency with the passing of time.

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  5. Finite is shown so well in this delightful piece! Wonderful~

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  6. I like the idea of the entrance of the lover make sand - and time - flicker.

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  7. lovely poem, loaded with sentiments.

    great! :)

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  8. This really grabs me..it's what happens during a span of time that matters!

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  9. Way to seize the moment bkm.
    A savory poem!
    rel

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  10. I dread that time when the sands will be dark. Gorgeous piece. Haunting and gorgeous.

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  11. Time flies when you're enjoying yourself!

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  12. bkm,
    Again, you make us all yearn for love, the dark and delicious kind...

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  13. We need that special person who sparks our lives, when the sand does run out, we will have known joy. Great Magpie.

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  14. Time always seems to fly when you ar spending it with the ones that produce a spark! Great poem.

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  15. wonderful
    the light and dark of it all

    let's hope that time is always shining for you

    Rene

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  16. a very nice little romantic piece. :)

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  17. Loved the structure of this one! Wonderful post! =)

    -Weasel

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  18. Lovely. Poignant. A hint of sadness.

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  19. Einstein said that time is relative, you said it better. :)

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  20. Ah yes time. Can it really stand still. Is darkness always inevitable? I guess so but an intense experience can slow the world appreciably.

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  21. This is so beautiful and romantic.

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  22. lovely... to capture the opportunity of an open door... the sky is holding

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  23. Bkm...you have summed up what matters so eloquently....this moment....beautiful writing!
    :-)

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