Thursday, September 16, 2010

intent....


Magpie Tales #32

the grains of sands flicker
as they always do, when you walk through the door
is it just the time of day, or
more
the intent of your visit
that produces such spark
whatever,
let it not matter
the sands pass quickly
and soon
it will be
dark....

bkmackenzie
2010
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31 comments:

  1. Maude LynnSeptember 16, 2010 at 4:48 PM

    Perfectly turned!

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  2. Kathe W.September 16, 2010 at 4:56 PM

    lovely-so romantic

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  3. chiccorealSeptember 16, 2010 at 6:08 PM

    Dear bkm: This excellent romantic poem is so subtle and persuasive in a positively energized way and yet at the same time so foreboding of gloom which is so obviouslylooming and hence corruptible. ONe wants to take in the "intent of your visit" with the fullest and sensitive gusto before the sands of time run out! Let's hope the sands hold on for at least a good night's kiss!Great atmosphere! So romantic!

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  4. annell4September 16, 2010 at 6:14 PM

    Oh, so nice. I love it....it even has a feeling of time.

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  5. Brian MillerSeptember 16, 2010 at 6:42 PM

    so we need to move quick before the sands run out...smiles. nice verse...

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  6. AnonymousSeptember 16, 2010 at 6:46 PM

    Beautiful, romantic poem

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  7. TeresaSeptember 16, 2010 at 6:48 PM

    Excellent poem. It has such a sense of urgency with the passing of time.

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  8. Tumblewords:September 16, 2010 at 6:54 PM

    Finite is shown so well in this delightful piece! Wonderful~

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  9. spacedlawSeptember 16, 2010 at 10:26 PM

    I like the idea of the entrance of the lover make sand - and time - flicker.

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  10. Gabriela AbaloSeptember 17, 2010 at 4:14 AM

    lovely poem, loaded with sentiments.

    great! :)

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  11. LynSeptember 17, 2010 at 5:16 AM

    This really grabs me..it's what happens during a span of time that matters!

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  12. relSeptember 17, 2010 at 5:22 AM

    Way to seize the moment bkm.
    A savory poem!
    rel

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  13. Priyanka BhowmickSeptember 17, 2010 at 5:55 AM

    beautifully done!

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  14. Tess KincaidSeptember 17, 2010 at 6:23 AM

    I dread that time when the sands will be dark. Gorgeous piece. Haunting and gorgeous.

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  15. MartinSeptember 17, 2010 at 9:06 AM

    Time flies when you're enjoying yourself!

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  16. ninotazizSeptember 17, 2010 at 9:29 AM

    bkm,
    Again, you make us all yearn for love, the dark and delicious kind...

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  17. HelenSeptember 17, 2010 at 10:19 AM

    We need that special person who sparks our lives, when the sand does run out, we will have known joy. Great Magpie.

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  18. Mrs.TrellisSeptember 17, 2010 at 10:44 AM

    A true poem. Well done.

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  19. Kristen HaskellSeptember 17, 2010 at 10:45 AM

    Time always seems to fly when you ar spending it with the ones that produce a spark! Great poem.

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  20. UnknownSeptember 17, 2010 at 1:55 PM

    wonderful
    the light and dark of it all

    let's hope that time is always shining for you

    Rene

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  21. RiverSeptember 17, 2010 at 5:03 PM

    a very nice little romantic piece. :)

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  22. WeaselSeptember 17, 2010 at 5:50 PM

    Loved the structure of this one! Wonderful post! =)

    -Weasel

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  23. TinaSeptember 18, 2010 at 9:19 AM

    So heartfelt and lovely!

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  24. Steve CapelinSeptember 18, 2010 at 11:07 PM

    Lovely. Poignant. A hint of sadness.

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  25. RASeptember 19, 2010 at 3:32 AM

    Einstein said that time is relative, you said it better. :)

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  26. Steve CapelinSeptember 19, 2010 at 5:57 AM

    Ah yes time. Can it really stand still. Is darkness always inevitable? I guess so but an intense experience can slow the world appreciably.

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  27. Karen SSeptember 19, 2010 at 8:39 PM

    This is so beautiful and romantic.

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  28. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallSeptember 20, 2010 at 4:41 PM

    simply fabulous.

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  29. ~T~September 21, 2010 at 11:32 AM

    Seize the hour! Lovely.

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  30. ms pieSeptember 21, 2010 at 1:17 PM

    lovely... to capture the opportunity of an open door... the sky is holding

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  31. Carrie Van HornSeptember 21, 2010 at 3:18 PM

    Bkm...you have summed up what matters so eloquently....this moment....beautiful writing!
    :-)

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