Monday, June 4, 2012

the thorn


it's graphic (this relationship)
the laying and the lifting
of it

covet i
the measure of you
design every movement of you
in my core
i dance in (my own) self created
consciousness,
carry what
was tomorrow wrapped as today
in a velvet blue sky
ribbon-ed white - soft, softer

control me? i say, "Yes" to it
love me i say, "No" not yet, not yet
but within time
the truest course of it - the subtly slow, swelling
of it

hand me the rose
one concealing but paper promise
unsigned and unsealed, for
i am trustworthy to lack of - committed
to the hope (of you)
and to the haunting beauty of
the thorn 

bkmackenzie
copyrighted 2012

12 comments:

  1. covet i
    the measure of you...really cool lines there bk...carry what was tomorrow wrapped as today...another great line...and in the line of the immortal bards....every rose has its thorn...smiles..

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  2. Well...I wish I could write like you, but then I'd not enjoy nearly so much the reading. So I am blessed to be here and read such eloquent love-lines.

    And, whence cometh these inspired words?

    "...carry what
    was tomorrow wrapped as today
    in a velvet blue sky..."

    Really crafty. Loved it all.
    PEACE!

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  3. I find it very romantic (rose) and erotic (thorn), the hope of love over time, but for now the swelling thorn. Yes.

    You've written the voice for "the soul of the rose". ;)

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  4. Beautiful...a rose was never as sweet nor a thorn as noticeable!

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  5. Whenever I visit your blog, Barbara, I've come to expect elegance...and you never disappoint. Just exquisite metaphoric imagery.

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  6. nice... esp. loved..
    i dance in (my own) self created
    consciousness,
    carry what
    was tomorrow wrapped as today...

    ...and awesome closure as well...there is a haunting beauty in thorns as well...maybe makes the rose even more special..

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  7. Beautiful writing, Barbara--I love the distinction--an unexpected one--you make between love and control, permanence and impermanence.

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  8. Such an elegant beauty you have here--and your blog is beautiful!

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  9. Like the dance and paper promise, and haunting thorn ~ Lovely share ~

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  10. Amazing writing here. I love the covet stanza, I found it exceptionally strong. Really like the continuity, transitions and the dialogue fragments later on. Great read. Thanks

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  11. I love the dance of your words and the romance n' wonder, of this captivating beauty~

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  12. You write so beautifully of love, control and the willingness of some women to keep being pricked by the same painful thorn of hope. Addicted to love, I guess. Enjoyed reading this.

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