Monday, September 12, 2011

colder than normal



let me be candid - as
the layers of your musing
have me longing for a winter much colder
than normal - Zhivago
will always have a piece of my heart

as motherless
seems common knowledge in a self-burial
with stillness of water
fostering challenge for a flame bearer such as ..yourself
you - who see everything
as fluid, as flowing somewhere -but

my love even rabbits morph
to white in tundra- product of protective
covering against an internal
Bolshevik revolt - though i have envisioned
in your eyes promise, that porthole
to grandeur, knowing it is only my own refusal to believe
that has me seeing red

bkmackenzie
copyrighted 2011

colder than normal by signed...bkm



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  1. AnonymousSeptember 13, 2011 at 12:44 AM

    "Zhivago
    will always have a piece of my heart"

    (In your words you have reminded me that the music was as warm as the snow was cold...)


    "as motherless
    seems common knowledge in a self-burial
    with stillness of water"


    And what a portrait of the human condition
    Excellence again, word pictures extraordinaire

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  2. The UnknowngnomeSeptember 13, 2011 at 12:48 AM

    I wish I could put into words the levels this takes me through. This is to become one of my favs of yours. Umm, umm, umm.

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  3. GlynnSeptember 13, 2011 at 4:25 AM

    One of my all-time favorite movies. I was 13 when it was first released, and I even remember the movie theater where I saw it in New Orleans. The poem brought it all back again.

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  4. annell4September 13, 2011 at 5:21 AM

    I love this!!! So beautiful!

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  5. Brian MillerSeptember 13, 2011 at 5:34 AM

    very nice bk...been a while since i sawthe movie...but i really like the flow and the last stanza nice turn to personal responsibility....

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  6. libithinaSeptember 13, 2011 at 3:49 PM

    Wonderful!! ~ a loss of faith wanting so much to believe ~ as his eyes show so much promise ~ can there be trust ~ but self protection has to be ~
    Lovely film too x

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  7. MichaelSeptember 13, 2011 at 4:01 PM

    very nice

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  8. LauraSeptember 13, 2011 at 4:56 PM

    Love this "even rabbits morph
    to white in tundra- product of protective
    covering against an internal
    Bolshevik revolt"...well done.

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  9. PatriciaSeptember 13, 2011 at 8:10 PM

    Oh, I loved the last stanza...
    beautifully written.

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  10. Mark KerstetterSeptember 14, 2011 at 8:44 AM

    I wonder sometimes what poetry really means to us - we who can't even imagine being persecuted for making it.

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  11. AnonymousSeptember 14, 2011 at 9:41 AM

    product of protective
    covering against an internal
    Bolshevik revolt - though i have envisioned
    in your eyes promise, that porthole
    to grandeur,

    Touching and in touch with the real dangers of love, art making, and life. Thank you.

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  12. UnknownSeptember 14, 2011 at 11:27 AM

    a beautiful & serene piece bkm... a lot of gems in here... and love the line about rabbits

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  13. Jenne' R. Andrews September 14, 2011 at 12:15 PM

    Wonderful-- this poem is very coherent, evocative, eloquent all at once. xxxj

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  14. hedgewitchSeptember 14, 2011 at 12:44 PM

    The color use here is subtle and turns the poem several times--fine writing, barbara, compressed and yielding, with both conflict and resolution.

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  15. Jannie FunsterSeptember 14, 2011 at 12:50 PM

    Oh that was one memorable movie -- which I recently watched for the first time, but the last part of the movie would not play. Saw the Keira Knightly version tho in its entirety, and was swept away beautifully by the story. Yes, that movie for the first time recently too.

    I like how the story inspired your chilly poem! A s a Canada gal, I know cold.

    xo

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  16. ScarletSeptember 14, 2011 at 1:54 PM

    I haven't seen the movie but I like these lines:

    even rabbits morph
    to white in tundra- product of protective
    covering against an internal
    Bolshevik revolt

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  17. signed...bkmSeptember 14, 2011 at 3:13 PM

    thanks everyone for comments...if you have not seen the movie - I do so recommend - the 1965 verson won 8 Oscars I believe - breathtaking backdrop of history...bkm

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  18. Ann LeFloreSeptember 14, 2011 at 5:01 PM

    I have never seen this film and after reading your words I want to run right out and see it now
    http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/09/13/a-new-life-begins/

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  19. AnonymousSeptember 14, 2011 at 8:32 PM

    Love the movie and Love your capture of the moments. Beautiful work.

    Beth

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  20. Henry ClemmonsSeptember 15, 2011 at 12:37 AM

    Excellente. Luved ur voice. 2nd stanza moved me the most. Deep and layered. Love the movie mention and the word choices to support ur mood and message. You're top notch. Inspiring as always. Dig the recordings to.

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  21. UnknownSeptember 15, 2011 at 6:14 AM

    Wonderful write, and really enjoyed the reading! ~ Rose

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  22. Geoff M. PopeSeptember 15, 2011 at 10:56 PM

    Mesmerizing writing. I especially like “the layers of your musing” and “porthole to grandeur.” Regarding Dr. Zhivago, last night I watched a movie with Julie Christie in it — how beautiful she was and is...even at age 70.

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