Tuesday, June 14, 2011

the shell i live within



i test the shell i live within
the parting of flesh
from soul,

i test those who gather sea
this heart with time
i've held,
all color shining ever deep, the depths
of a humanity
and Who of it? would ask
i begin again
when all in its furrows sleep, from
ocean full of galaxy to a wave further
even angels can record
a kaleidoscope of time and breath
for those in seek of
simplest word, a touch
hidden by the shell i test
spiraled past a given line, but never
missed or truly felt as if it sand  - slipping
from my mind....

bkmackenzie
copyrighted 2011

Posted for Magpie Tales

11 comments:

  1. the lines that caught me were for those in seek of simplest word, touch....as that encompasses many of us and seats us right with in your words.

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  2. "a kaleidoscope of time and breath" such a perfect line....lovely

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  3. "...all color shining ever deep" beautiful words! Is it possible you get better daily?

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  4. The last two lines really reinforce the whole write, nice job.

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  5. Complex and thoughful, but a very good read.

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  6. The sibilance in this calls the ocean to my ear. Very nice. I like the "i test" theme.

    Kat

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  7. Barb, love where this image took you. Nicely done. I see you have Pablo Neruda on your sidebar. After moving to Mexico and speaking Spanish on regular basis, I have a complete and unending love of his work.

    Pamela

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  8. Thank you all and thank you Pam a have his book next to my bed...one that is always enlightening to read ...everyone thank you for your comments...bkm

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  9. What a special work. I whisper-read it to myself three times to get the rhythm just right in my ear. Quietly beautiful poem.

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  10. beautiful capture of the shell and its inner world.

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