Tuesday, June 7, 2011

mirage

I saw you moving
                               into the eye of the storm
                                              towards a saddled
mammal tall

I thought you would
circumvent the inevitable
conquer the nature of all torment
internal, match it
with movement heighten quick, but
unchallenged
you set compass dead
center, embodied the sting

of sand, each particle piercing
skinned hide until
all ran red into a sea set
to desert; my eye

my Bedouin blue, focused
on an outcome, taking
rest in the mirage I believed
to be eternal

bkmackenzie
copyrighted 2011

23 comments:

  1. we all fall for our mirages...the stanza, thought you could circumvent, top notch...enjoyed bk

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  2. Poetic comment:

    Liked the flow and rhythm to "towards a saddled
    mammal tall", "circumvent the inevitable", "center, embodied the sting", "until all ran red into a sea set".

    I enjoyed the images.

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  3. Such gorgeous visual images.

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  4. My skin actually 'felt' the sting of wind-blown sandy particles. You have given imagery to this eye far beyond sight.

    PEACE!

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  5. Wow imagery abounds
    Here at your grounds
    Very nice write you gave
    I'll stop before I rant and rave..lol

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  6. Barbara, with the word "Bedouin" I felt this poem through and through.

    Writing Arabic stories, I found a resonance in your words....and a mystery and something beyond the obvious words and imagery.

    Sandstorms, camels and courage.

    Marvelous poem, Barbara....haunting.

    Lady Nyo

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  7. sounds like a suicidal gesture - yet, something more admirable that I can't quite put my finger on.

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  8. "...Bedouin blue." What a marvelous phrase.

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  9. It doesn't get any better, Bedouin!

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  10. Complex and challenging I love the cadences in this rich and rewarding poem.

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  11. I love the images you created! A beautiful piece!

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  12. rather wonderful indeed - love this one BKM

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  13. Cool picture. I felt sadness and disappoint in your words, in experiencing an unexpected end...

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  14. This is beautiful. You are so gifted and you infuse such spirit in your words. I love how you capture life and our illusions. Thank you.

    Myrna
    (Daily Spirit)

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  15. Lots to ponder andmany lines to enjoy. Great skill.

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  16. This is absolutely gorgeous! Loved it!

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  17. This is amazing imagery. Wonderful - class act. Simply adore the Bedouin blue

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