I saw you moving
into the eye of the storm
towards a saddled
mammal tall
I thought you would
circumvent the inevitable
conquer the nature of all torment
internal, match it
with movement heighten quick, but
unchallenged
you set compass dead
center, embodied the sting
of sand, each particle piercing
skinned hide until
all ran red into a sea set
to desert; my eye
my Bedouin blue, focused
on an outcome, taking
rest in the mirage I believed
to be eternal
bkmackenzie
copyrighted 2011
Rather wonderful
ReplyDeletewe all fall for our mirages...the stanza, thought you could circumvent, top notch...enjoyed bk
ReplyDeletePoetic comment:
ReplyDeleteLiked the flow and rhythm to "towards a saddled
mammal tall", "circumvent the inevitable", "center, embodied the sting", "until all ran red into a sea set".
I enjoyed the images.
brilliant imagery
ReplyDeleteSuch gorgeous visual images.
ReplyDeleteMy skin actually 'felt' the sting of wind-blown sandy particles. You have given imagery to this eye far beyond sight.
ReplyDeletePEACE!
Wow imagery abounds
ReplyDeleteHere at your grounds
Very nice write you gave
I'll stop before I rant and rave..lol
Barbara, with the word "Bedouin" I felt this poem through and through.
ReplyDeleteWriting Arabic stories, I found a resonance in your words....and a mystery and something beyond the obvious words and imagery.
Sandstorms, camels and courage.
Marvelous poem, Barbara....haunting.
Lady Nyo
sounds like a suicidal gesture - yet, something more admirable that I can't quite put my finger on.
ReplyDelete"...Bedouin blue." What a marvelous phrase.
ReplyDeleteIt doesn't get any better, Bedouin!
ReplyDeleteComplex and challenging I love the cadences in this rich and rewarding poem.
ReplyDeleteI love the images you created! A beautiful piece!
ReplyDeleterather wonderful indeed - love this one BKM
ReplyDeleteCool picture. I felt sadness and disappoint in your words, in experiencing an unexpected end...
ReplyDeleteThis is beautiful. You are so gifted and you infuse such spirit in your words. I love how you capture life and our illusions. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteMyrna
(Daily Spirit)
Lots to ponder andmany lines to enjoy. Great skill.
ReplyDeleteWonderfully vivid!
ReplyDeleteSuperb, brilliant.
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
Very nice, B.
ReplyDeleteThis is absolutely gorgeous! Loved it!
ReplyDeleteThis is amazing imagery. Wonderful - class act. Simply adore the Bedouin blue
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