Tuesday, May 31, 2011

past tense




because I lived in the moment
I could not remember my past
or you, or the facets
of my emotions - the cutting of which
at the timing I recorded
painful, full indeed with
words of the you

and that you
I placed as gem to behold
to cherish, vowing timelessness
and I suppose purpose
beyond occasion or a longing
called forever -

ever after had my heart lined up
straight
clutching a dance card - not bearing
your signature - the choice was
monumental
to live with the present tense
and love you
or move into the future and lose
its knowing

bkmackenzie
copyrighted 2011

Posted for One Shot Wednesday

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16 comments:

  1. UnknownMay 31, 2011 at 2:55 PM

    lovely poem... tying in the moment, the past, & the future all into an amazing piece

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  2. anthonynorthMay 31, 2011 at 3:28 PM

    An excellent muse through time.

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  3. Brian MillerMay 31, 2011 at 4:01 PM

    mmm...you know, it might be best to pick a different tense at times, depending on who you are dancing with...smiles.

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  4. PattiKenMay 31, 2011 at 6:03 PM

    a longing called forever" - Those are such beautiful words, perfect for this lovely waltz thought time.

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  5. ayalaMay 31, 2011 at 6:04 PM

    Love this!

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  6. the unknowngnomeMay 31, 2011 at 6:26 PM

    Only love in the present and a wonderful present love is.

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  7. Sherry Blue SkyMay 31, 2011 at 6:41 PM

    So powerful, and the last four lines blow me away. Wonderful, bkm!

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  8. Elizabeth YoungMay 31, 2011 at 10:33 PM

    Very clever poem mixing past, present and future in lyrical and thoughtful prose. Lovely.

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  9. Lady NyoJune 1, 2011 at 5:12 AM

    This poem, bk...grabbed me with the most emotion. You speak of a universal issue, if we would just allow ourselves to feel this...

    Absolutely beautiful. Spoke deeply to me.

    Lady Nyo

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  10. Pat HattJune 1, 2011 at 6:50 AM

    Future, past
    It is all quite vast
    As you write in the present
    Reading it was oh so pleasant
    But now it's the past
    As more will come making it not the last
    Enjoyed the read
    Here at your feed

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  11. FireblossomJune 1, 2011 at 6:57 AM

    Ah, but some say the moment is all there is...

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  12. Kerry O'ConnorJune 1, 2011 at 9:00 AM

    This is a most interesting interpretation of the painting. I love the last four lines describing the choice - painful and poignant.

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  13. AnonymousJune 1, 2011 at 1:07 PM

    Playing with concepts of time isn't easy, but you've done it well.

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  14. AnonymousJune 1, 2011 at 5:59 PM

    I've read this several times as I reflect inward...a wonderful, thought filled write. Lovely response to prompt ~

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  15. AnonymousJune 1, 2011 at 9:07 PM

    I loved this one. Good craft and flowing emotions.

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  16. OliviaJune 2, 2011 at 12:58 AM

    A very nice one Barbie. I do have a childhood crush (in my mind) and often get lost thinking about him and on the same lines as you have written here!

    Now I am thinking of HIM again.. sigh!
    past was bittersweet with him.. he is not in my present.. future- not known!

    Hugs xx

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