a window of repetitive motion
prevents any thought of leaping, opportunity
breathing diffident
inconspicuous consummation masked
in the obvious retrograde states
of emergency - constrained in
breaking news: (un)decided lottery
(un)precedented find, (un)recoverable vibration;
(un)acceptable deviants
any elevator hoped - labeled,
in case of fire use stairs, a solemn
sermon for definition of free willed
EXIT
bkmackenzie
copyrighted 2011
excellent cadence and flow...would love to hear this one read aloud...you imagery pops here and there but i like the elevator...
ReplyDeleteI love the elevator! Up and down, up and down...a window of repetitive motion...Exit!
ReplyDeleteLove the musicality of the prose.
ReplyDeleteI'm going to take this as a hotel poem, the whisk from ground to room become a trope on the freedom to get off on any damn floor you please (free will). It's pretty cerebral and jumps around a lot -- but then so does thought, free thought at least. And when a person lives a lot of their life up in their head, this sort of movement between floors is par for the course. Nice kicker at the end, that when all this fails there's always a Plan B - Use Stairs! :) - Brendan
ReplyDeleteI love your new blog. And I love your mind, the way it looks at the world like a child with the most profound views.
ReplyDeleteMy God bkm.. I think this is my fav of yours... so greatly written, & use of clever imagery is amazing
ReplyDeleteWhat an excellent poem, Barb, the flow is so natural and well-paced.
ReplyDeletePamela
I've been looking for the stairs a lot lately...nice imagery.
ReplyDeleteWow, bkm, what a FANTASTIC poem! So skilled. And your site looks AMAZING!!!!!!!! A totally professional poetry site, just splendid!
ReplyDelete"a window of repetitive motion
ReplyDeleteprevents any thought of leaping"
i LOVE this! you are brilliant. amazing poem!
dani
profound words.
ReplyDeletevery lovely imagery.
Genius. An amazing poem. Hope to see more from you- I'm Following.
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