Wednesday, March 23, 2011

My Fate - Magpie #58

The ceiling fan it stilled
as I
all shadow too with sleep
Would I draw my sword to end
the still, and
my inner plight
rid self of demons - that walk
through a tortured night
Who then
would I duel?
draw sabre in my wake

To discard code of Musketeer
I will not take
to be my fate...

bkmackenzie
copyrighted 2011

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18 comments:

  1. CorinnaMarch 23, 2011 at 12:20 PM

    "rid self of demons - that walk
    through a tortured night." Beautiful.

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  2. ElaineMarch 23, 2011 at 1:05 PM

    Battling with ones inner demons...yes that is a fight that goes on day and night!

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  3. hyperCRYPTICalMarch 23, 2011 at 1:39 PM

    Beautiful words. Bravo!

    Anna :o]

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  4. Tumblewords:March 23, 2011 at 2:40 PM

    the dark night of the soul...very nicely done!

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  5. LouiseMarch 23, 2011 at 2:44 PM

    Great magpie, full of old world writing, perfect for the piece.

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  6. Brian MillerMarch 23, 2011 at 4:17 PM

    got a few of those demons, if i can borrow your sword...i ate my 3 musketeers already...smiles.

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  7. BrownpaperbaggirlMarch 23, 2011 at 5:25 PM

    Powerful, dark, and intriguing.

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  8. Isabel DoyleMarch 24, 2011 at 4:07 AM

    menacing

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  9. Coloring Outside the LinesMarch 24, 2011 at 6:21 AM

    Demons in the night- very powerful.

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  10. OliviaMarch 24, 2011 at 8:56 AM

    Killing those demons is worth it! Well said :) Loved the presentation!!
    "draw sabre in my wake" - very powerful!

    Hugs xox

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  11. HelenMarch 24, 2011 at 9:02 AM

    Dark dreams are never fun ... I enjoyed your poem!!

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  12. Lucy WestenraMarch 24, 2011 at 11:46 AM

    Complex and interesting.

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  13. Doctor FTSEMarch 24, 2011 at 1:07 PM

    This is a good Magpie. Nothing in it is overstated . . always a temptation with this kind of subject.

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  14. Brigid O'ConnorMarch 24, 2011 at 2:54 PM

    Beautiful, elegant piece, your blog art is so gorgeous too.

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  15. Ami MattisonMarch 25, 2011 at 2:21 AM

    Dark and nicely restrained, like the speaker's own impulses. How to kill one's demons without offing one's self? An existential question. And I suppose "the code" saves lots of lives. Thanks for such a provocative and thought-provoking piece!

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  16. The Blog of BeeMarch 27, 2011 at 8:47 AM

    Powerful

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  17. RNSANEMarch 27, 2011 at 2:57 PM

    What to do with the demons that stalk one during the day? Mine linger long after sleep.

    Very tenacious poem!

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  18. Tess KincaidMarch 28, 2011 at 5:01 AM

    That demon, insomnia, tortured me at times, as well. Beautiful write, B.

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