Yes it is a dance, a Sufi swirl of sweet-bitter words here, the naiads and the sicklemen about their dance within the margins of a poem. "Neotreic sweat" is such a strange, interesting phrase, suggesting a new trope or turn on old themes, arising or rousing from some Catholic (I use that broadly) slumber. The entire stanza is pure peaches. Fascinating ... wonderful. - Brendan
Beautiful.. I love the way the words are falling, perfect match for the image.
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Thank you Anthony...always like your input...bkm
ReplyDeleteDelicate flow of words. Lovely.
ReplyDeleteThis was beautiful; really enjoyed it~
ReplyDeleteYes it is a dance, a Sufi swirl of sweet-bitter words here, the naiads and the sicklemen about their dance within the margins of a poem. "Neotreic sweat" is such a strange, interesting phrase, suggesting a new trope or turn on old themes, arising or rousing from some Catholic (I use that broadly) slumber. The entire stanza is pure peaches. Fascinating ... wonderful. - Brendan
ReplyDeleteYes, I love the words with the image!
ReplyDeleteSo beautiful, and I especially love "Rumi dances." Wonderful poem!
ReplyDeleteThis poem was so evocative! It swirled like the dancer and the movement was fluid and fascinating. Word theatre.
ReplyDeleteLove the way this whirls, on the page and in the reading. Thank you.
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