Wednesday, January 5, 2011

Swan Lake



i caught myself in reflection
and thought i saw
you there too,
the wind choreographed
Swan Lake -  an ugly duckling
awaiting his discard, lifted a wing
feathered white, aware;  the wind lured
him higher, than higher -
and i knew then it was not
of  you my eye took witness - but
the pirouette of 
awakening

bkmackenzie
copyrighted 2011

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36 comments:

  1. MaggieJanuary 5, 2011 at 12:48 PM

    This was wonderful. Such beautiful words.

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  2. PaulineJanuary 5, 2011 at 12:52 PM

    "the pirouette of awakening"

    What a perceptive way of putting it...

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  3. SuzJanuary 5, 2011 at 12:57 PM

    oh my...oh my
    loved it

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  4. Brian MillerJanuary 5, 2011 at 2:13 PM

    nice. love the ballet references and now that you point it out...

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  5. Paul CJanuary 5, 2011 at 2:25 PM

    the pirouette of
    awakening...a stunning image!

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  6. relJanuary 5, 2011 at 2:57 PM

    Bkm,
    In reflection, a new awakening.
    The dance carries us higher on the wind and our imagination is free. Nice!
    rel

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  7. AndreasJanuary 5, 2011 at 2:58 PM

    "the pirouette of / awakening"
    is a gorgeous line.
    This piece has a wonderful wholeness to it.

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  8. Myrna R.January 5, 2011 at 3:04 PM

    I love the line too. The image is striking. Lovely poem.

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  9. Tess KincaidJanuary 5, 2011 at 3:54 PM

    Beautiful piece. My dear auntie like to call me "Swannie" after the Hans Christian Anderson tale.

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  10. signed...bkmJanuary 5, 2011 at 4:09 PM

    thank you everyone from Thingy to Tess - this was a great prompt to work the mind....bkm

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  11. UnknownJanuary 5, 2011 at 4:34 PM

    beautiful take...that last line is gold

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  12. lissaJanuary 5, 2011 at 4:56 PM

    lovely as always.

    just stopping by to say thanks and hope your new year is full of wonderful things

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  13. joannaJanuary 5, 2011 at 5:22 PM

    I love this poem as representative of the "Black Swan" classic ballet-- using Tess's photo prompt as an inspiration. Your poem is a stunning execution of this fine ballet.-- "Black Swan is the grand pas deux from Swan Lake, Act three. It was done with a grand abundance of force, deep back bends, and ballonnes and circles of turns.

    Thanks for your comment I looked at the link you sent. nice.

    joanny

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  14. KBJanuary 5, 2011 at 5:46 PM

    Beautiful poem.

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  15. LynJanuary 5, 2011 at 5:59 PM

    The awakening..how beautiful to be there! Lovely..

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  16. tattytiaraJanuary 5, 2011 at 6:09 PM

    Nice spin - no pun intended!

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  17. Kristen HaskellJanuary 5, 2011 at 6:17 PM

    Gorgeous work here! I really love this piece.

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  18. Strummed WordsJanuary 5, 2011 at 7:42 PM

    I like your interpretation of the blue black prompt.

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  19. ReflectionsJanuary 5, 2011 at 9:24 PM

    Lovely dance, stretching the bounds of music, placing the feet precisely as needed. Well done.

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  20. ninotazizJanuary 5, 2011 at 10:06 PM

    I caught my breathe in the end - such a beautiful poem bkm - as always.

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  21. Priyanka BhowmickJanuary 5, 2011 at 11:07 PM

    such beautiful imagery. wonderful composition!

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  22. dsJanuary 5, 2011 at 11:28 PM

    "the pirouette of awakening" oh, you know how to create a phrase! Thank you for this.

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  23. Jenne' R. Andrews January 6, 2011 at 3:07 AM

    Very beautiful== simple but quintessentially lyrical!

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  24. Gordon MasonJanuary 6, 2011 at 3:31 AM

    Liked the image of a pirouette of awakening.

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  25. FireblossomJanuary 6, 2011 at 4:18 AM

    Ever upward, darlin'. I wonder how well we ever really see those around us, obscured as they are by what they mean to US.

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  26. annell4January 6, 2011 at 4:56 AM

    Leaves me breathless!

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  27. Everyday GoddessJanuary 6, 2011 at 8:21 AM

    love the pirouette of awakening, very delightful!

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  28. Sherry Blue SkyJanuary 6, 2011 at 10:32 AM

    Wow! A really stunning poem. "The pirouette of awakening". What a great line. I loved "lifted a wing, feathered white". Beautiful!

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  29. Carrie Van HornJanuary 6, 2011 at 10:39 AM

    I adore that line "The pirouette of awakening" as well....this is a breathtaking poem Bkm! :-)

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  30. CadJanuary 6, 2011 at 11:25 AM

    A lovely dance in words...

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  31. KavitaJanuary 6, 2011 at 1:30 PM

    LOVED the analogy! I suppose realization is not always a pleasant affair...
    This was a very classic example of that!!!
    Very stylishly done, bkm!!!

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  32. Paul Andrew RussellJanuary 6, 2011 at 3:29 PM

    A lovely poem. I always loved the tale of the ugly duckling being transformed into the beautiful swan. Your poem took me back to when I first heard that tale as a child. :-)

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  33. Other MaryJanuary 7, 2011 at 6:15 AM

    This is really wonderful bkm. I love the opening and closing lines, and they realization in between.

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  34. Carmela-JJanuary 8, 2011 at 3:35 AM

    I love the interpretation of the image, such flowing language telling beautifully a classic tale!

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  35. Jhon BakerJanuary 8, 2011 at 7:30 PM

    perfect closing line. perfect.

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  36. Lucy WestenraJanuary 9, 2011 at 3:37 AM

    Beautifully mysterious. Amazing interpretation of Willow's prompt.

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