Monday, December 6, 2010

Sonnet II - Winter Love



I will breathe not the morning air as it is born to be
Nor gather in the sight of a newly fallen snow
I will take breath instead in love gifted from such as thee
Pure as only love can conceive or I can want - or know
The shelter, the shield of your arms , find I comfort there
Among dreams of pause, that rested space between larks song
Lost beyond mapped longitude, or unparalleled gratitude of error
Not its meaning, nor its length of day, nor in its night marred long
But in love itself, its pedestal where this, our love does stand
As winter calls all others to its cold barren, most un-fertile ground
And days breath, no longer held as gift once vital by any man
Has fallen beneath a world coveted in will of life's gentle sound
Spring, its bloom of rose, the lesser sin said of what love should hold
Wanton gifts of sun's abiding passion, as My Love, willingly unfolds


bkmackenzie
2010

Posted for: One Shot Wednesday at One Shot Poetry:Where Poets, Writers and Artists Meet

29 comments:

  1. How many superlatives can I use for this poem? a bunch - but I'll stick with beautiful.

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  2. thank you Glynn, started this one about a month ago and let it sit...with winter closing in it was time to finish it....blessings...bkm

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  3. breath that love...deep..nicely done on the sonnet...

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  4. thank you Brian...always appreciate your words....bkm

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  5. Amazing sonnet
    Makes me breathe in with peace..

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  6. Thank you Dulce....these is number ii...hopefully there will be more....blessings...bkm

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  7. So much beautiful imagery and depth. I love this one! I really like this place "Among dreams of pause, that rested space between larks song"

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  8. Such depth BKM... A wonderful winter poem!

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  9. Thanks Suzi and Diane...I am working at sonnets...love the sound of them when they are done right...trying not to get to wordy..your comments are always welcome....blessings..bkm

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  10. BKM you have such discipline - great piece.

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  11. You are more than a poet....you are an amazing one...this is a brilliant sonnett!....Worthy of a wide audiance! You continually inspire me Bkm!
    :-)

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  12. Brilliant sonet, your work is stunning


    cheers :)

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  13. Good job with the sonnet, and interesting use of archaic language. Great turn too! Thanks for sharing this!

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  14. This really is amazing. I'm impressed at anyone who has the patience to write a sonnet.

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  15. I can't begin to tell you how I like this. I love the voice, which would be at home among the voices of the poets of long ago.

    My favorite line: "...Among dreams of pause, that rested space between larks song." Heavenly.

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  16. Sonnets are hard, but like all hard work, rewarding. The first four lines of this especially are just inspired, and flow like music. Very nice work, bkm.

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  17. Not really familiar with sonnets.But this is lovely!I still have much to learn and it's amazing how different each poet's style is.And your words seems effortless.

    Beautiful one shot!

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  18. Sonnet form, and beautifully, beautifully done.

    A classic here. and haunting.

    Lady Nyo

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  19. find I comfort there among dreams of pause....hangs well in the air...with the breaths odf the other lines

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  20. It takes a lot of thought in creating a sonnet. Excellent piece!

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  21. Loved the ending couplet; you manage to be hopeful yet playfully cynical at the same time. That's no mean feat; very impressive 1Shot. You never disappoint when it comes to emotionally expressive poetry. Also good work staying in form; a problem that has constantly bedeviled my efforts at anything but free associative writing. Stay warm amidst winter's breath.

    crb.

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  22. Unfolding love is such a great descriptive -George Harrison used it in "While My Guitar Gently Weeps"

    (Besides, who wants that old cold snow anyway?)

    Nice One Shot!

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  23. nicely put... I assume you're consciously ignoring sonnet meter? So more of a modern take on a sonnet? Some great lines Suzy

    Warm regards

    Luke @ WordSalad

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  24. Great write and this line was wonderful "unparalleled gratitude of error"

    Cheers!

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  25. (sighs adoringly) BKM, as always, stunning write. Nice One Shot. Love and Light, Sender

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  26. Oh.. there was something very warm, pure and sensuous about this one... it played out in my mind like a wonderfully romantic song...
    A beautiful One Shot, bkm...
    (hugs)

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  27. This poem is of the stuff of Shakespeare, Browning...I'm not a huge fan of love poetry but when they are executed like this...wow!

    My one shot:
    http://liv2write2day.wordpress.com/2010/12/07/rediscovery-a-random-word-poem-for-jingles-poetry-potluck/

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  28. Glorious! A nice write, my friend.

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