a year secures its legacy
as the moon veils her phase
with light facing inward, reflecting
the passing of life's days,
and an aura
surrounding morning
its all to fated hand
that I often think about, but can seldom
understand - the love
you imparted with the waxing
of a tear - faithfully
a promise, the gift of but one year..
of days and nights as
lovers
an all to fatal vow... now
ending as you take your leave
along with goddess
and her throne, shrouding me
in memory - and standing
all alone....
bkmackenzie
copyrighted 2010
Posted for One Shot Wednesday: Where Poets, Writers and Artists Meet
this ends on a very sombre not...the passing and leaving...and alone in the end...but then again all things are new once more...
ReplyDelete"the gift of but one year". I love the combining of the eclipse with the relationship, both waning. Beautiful writing, bkm.
ReplyDeletethanks Brian and Sherry...yes the year is waning and the minds is looking forward, renewal is always a good feeling - a baptism in time.....bkm
ReplyDeleteMy new favorite of yours! Loved the tying together of the relationship and the lunar cycle. The soft rhyme really drove this home. Nicely, done. As always.
ReplyDeleteLovely poem... 'that I often think about, but can seldom understand'...yeah ...and speaks of loss at the end...something I understand...lovely write :)
ReplyDeletelove how you start this - really strong - and love how you mix it with relationship - the beginnings and endings - cirles of life and hope..
ReplyDeleteYou know your way to my soul with your lines,always amazed with their powerful depth..beauty and elegance :)
ReplyDeletetaking a bow..:)
Beautiful, solemn and true. Too many good lines to list, but the opening and "all to" refrain are particularly strong. My mind wants to say "too" though--it's a force to transpose it into 'to' and makes me rethink. It changes the meaning very subtly. Quite clever and the whole piece excellent.
ReplyDeletethank you Tina, hedgewitch, Rose and Claudia for wonderful comments...and Louise...thank you - nice to meet you here and thanks for the follow....a Lunar Eclipse...has a way of focusing humanity....bkm
ReplyDeleteLove the phrase "as the moon veils her phase." Clever wordplay. Thanks for sharing.
ReplyDeleteI see more than one person was inspired by the lunar eclipse. (I missed it - too cloudy!)
ReplyDelete"shrouding me with memory
ReplyDeleteand standing all alone"
I actually felt myself standing in a place now shadowed and dark with the passing of the light...wonderful poem that captures transitions/phases on many levels...nature, symbol, spiritual...
superb one shot my lady
Truly amazing how you paint a beautiful picture with your words...i love this one Bkm! :-)
ReplyDeleteDramatic, emotional way to express being alone in the dark. "the love / ...you imparted with the waxing / of a tear" Fantastic transition connecting two fine stanzas. Great poem, bkm!
ReplyDeletea beautiful farewell to 2010...lovely poem.
ReplyDeleteI love the analogy here. "shrouding me
ReplyDeletein memory - and standing
all alone...." - excellent close
Such a beautiful, wistful poem! So many were inspired by last night's eclipse, and I couldn't see it for the clouds. Great poem!
ReplyDeleteI like the comparison you used here...waxing and waning on the cusp of moon, of a new year. I saw it too and it was a meaningful part of this year's season for me. Have a Merry Christmas.
ReplyDeleteOhhh and not another for over 400 years, such morose loneliness captured in such beautiful words, and for love hopefully not that long a wait... wonderfully written! :) ~April
ReplyDeleteIt's a farewell to a year, but it's more than that, too. It's a way at looking at personal history. It's a love poem. It's about mystery and looking forward and looking back. Wow.
ReplyDeletethis was so true....as we say goodbye to the year and welcome in whatever holds in store for us...the first stanza really was well written too...and i loved the way the rhyme kept appearing...thanks also for the support you have given me and One Stop this year...have a great christmas...pete
ReplyDeleteOnce again, wow-worthy work weaving emotion and nature imagery. Good stuff.
ReplyDeleteBefitting of an occurrence to usher in the new year. Together seeing it with many others yet was alone. Beautiful poem.
ReplyDeleteWow, what a lovely piece. I was listening to the right music to read this to as well, adds in the extra something to it.
ReplyDeleteVery nicely done, quite powerful and makes me really sad it was raining when the eclipse was happening in my area.
So far behind on bkm goodness! Must... catch... up...!
Bloody hell. That's beautiful bkm. It just flowed through me. What a great creative end to the week before christmas.
ReplyDeleteHave a good one.
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ReplyDeleteI had not seen you had taken advantage of such a meaningful moment... last tuesday... i could see the eclipse that special morning.
so full of meaning in that spiritual sense- you know
hey my dear bkm
want to wish you
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a lot of poignancy I felt here, also lot that was gently honorific of the feminine (without becoming 'feminist', if you see what I mean, still very much accessible to us male poets :)
ReplyDeleteStrong piece BKM
Warmest Salad
Luke @ WordSaladd
Wonderful poem.
ReplyDeleteI love it.
:)