Friday, October 15, 2010

The "Confessional"



i try not to fall into Confessionals
as a course of action, what would I do with
five Hail Marys and a Voodoo doll?
its really all about writing isn't it?  yes, i believe
it is.  

Morning is my mother..she suckles me
with her light (dim, bright) -- seems to always be
her choosing..mine to feed on or go hungry
another day  (control freak); condiments of words
and left over letters erased, backspaced off 
last nights table, placed under a pillow
for make-believe to decipher, to leave
a golden calf where decay was....Confessionals are for saints
and congruent mosaics ..

i am just a writer with
left over babble, paper mache' stuck to
floors throughout .... the forbidden food stain on a shirt
of goodwill - good habits disregarded for lack of
prayer...(god)

willing no one will be able to
read anything between these lines....or bookmark
thoughts as worthy of entrance...because like
you...i prefer meat on fridays to fish, if only to
witness the blood on the plate.....


bkmackenzie
copyrighted 2010

My post for  -One Shot Wednesday - Where Poets and Writers Meet..

31 comments:

  1. dang nice imagery...i think you are more than just a writer though...smiles. blood on the plate, nice.

    ? - was makebelive word play or spelling?

    nice write.

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  2. thanks Brian...you are my secret editor you know...glad you are always one of the first to read....do not know how you do it....glad you liked it...bkm

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  3. Wow! That is majorly great! back space image, I really like that!

    And "Five Hail Marys And A Voodoo Doll," grabs me as a good song title.

    Nice to meet you via Brian Miller.

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  4. very well done. I was left wanting more--c

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  5. Nice meeting you to Jannie...I see you are a songwriter...I will put it on my list to tune into your site and listen....thank you for your wonderful comments...bkm

    Thank you C.M. -- your thoughts are taken to heart..blessings..bkm

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  6. very FAB! this should totally be in print. I think the form could use a little work, it was sometimes a bit distracting with all the multiple periods/trail-offs. I think it might flow a lot better, pack even more punch (possible?). Great images, nothing wasted here, every word divine.

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  7. Thank you, wonderful read, I really enjoyed it.

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  8. I have a confession to make:
    I truly LOVE this poem!! You always amaze me with your wonderful talent Bkm! :-)

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  9. Yes, you are more than "just" a writer. This is brilliant: witty and profound. I love the "five Hail Marys and a voodoo doll" (giggle)..."Confessionals are for saints/and congruent mosaics."
    You have such a talent. Thank you for sharing this.

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  10. I think you laid it out plain enough...nothing left between the lines. Writing is my confessional, but I am a child of the night.
    This is very good, and of course, I'm still reading it a time or two more :)

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  11. thank you all - and yes, tracy writing it our confessional, and we are cleansed with the grace of it...blessings...bkm

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  12. I definitely sense you are more than just a writer with left over babble. Loved this poem! and yes, I do prefer meat on Fridays to fish sometimes. xo

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  13. glad i dont offend with my editor comments...smiles. glad you popped this one into one shot...

    busy week? have not seen much by you?

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  14. I do love this! You create some vivid images in here. Very nicely done.

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  15. This was profound, and that last line sticks in the mind.

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  16. I really enjoyed this and LOVED ...

    'condiments of words
    and left over letters erased, backspaced off
    last nights table'

    Wonderful!

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  17. There are so many great images in this I don't know where to start! It is simply brilliant, excellent writing!

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  18. Writing is often a confessional for me as well. Great piece...not simply a condiment.

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  19. Absolutely incredible writing. Read so well to me in my more "spiritual" beliefs also. I think the silences between / the thoughts within and written are heard sometimes far greater than those aloud, told "confessed" to another. ~ wonderful, wonderful writing...~April

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  20. Wow...I love the wrap up line...Well written, this was.

    Cheers!

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  21. Hallelujah! (LOL!) Nice One Shot!

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  22. ..the forbidden food stain on a shirt
    of goodwill..one of some great images you use here - fantastic write!

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  23. Bravo! I think you've been visiting my blog long enough to know how this poem went right into that place where all my little "pagans" are dancing wildly, shouting, "Hallelujah! Can you give me an 'Amen'?" Five Hail Marys and a voodoo doll? I love it.

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  24. Its very interesting piece... I like it.. you are just a great poet... thanks BKM for sharing it...

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    Twitter: @VerseEveryDay
    Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/

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  25. Depth on both artistic and a spiritual level of questioning life, writing, and the beliefs of the poet. Excellent ..bkm

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  26. hi bk...i have missed you of recent weeks but am ensuring i read everything from this weeks OSW...glad i have coz this was you at your "writing" best....loved the following part

    i am just a writer with
    left over babble, paper mache' stuck to
    floors throughout .... the forbidden food stain on a shirt
    of goodwill - good habits disregarded for lack of
    prayer...(god)

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  27. Pete and I are definitely on the same wavelength. This is a great write. Love and Light, Sender

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  28. Interesting mix of the semi-abstract and the solid. Demands re-reads, several of them. Effective work.

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  29. Perfectly written, amazing lines, powerful imagery, a tight write that invited all my senses in a joyful ride, i enjoyed this!
    YOU ARE A CLEVER WRITER..that is for sure :)

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