Saturday, September 25, 2010

Surface-less Dove..


times internal
at times external
unqualified at peace negotiation,
surrender squandered beneath an unmade bed;
plucked barren
seeing freedom only as needed -
wrap her in chaste white feather,
one blue eye
allow her fly, fly ...command it, damn-it




with hope springs promise
possibilities branch,
a returned symbol, humane,  hu -man, persecution
placated; grounding tears, flood dammed... damn it fly
surface-less dove.. fly......
grant truce, trust - land it, stamp it...damn it
absorb this blood...let it walk straight.
renewed again...unified, qualified
fly...dove...
fly..

bkmackenzie
copyrighted 2010

33 comments:

  1. "renewed again" Yes! Hope is there, always...

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  2. wow - this style sounds pretty different to what i have read of you before - like it - unified, qualified - fly - yes - fly!

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  3. nice...i like the change up...the symbolism of the dove, then the blood and the frustration...tight piece...

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  4. Such beautiful symbolism and truth in this lovely poem...you always amaze me with your talent! :-)

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  5. "The dove is never free..." (Leonard Cohen)

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  6. You are right Shay...Leonard said it best....bkm

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  7. Oh, this is nice...Reminds me SO of my thoughts as I once wrote:

    "...Fly little bird,
    Fly with the wind
    For if you do not
    You have surely sinned..."

    Glad to see you again!

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  8. Very staccato; was that on purpose? Works very well in the style/themes of the poem. I had the image of a wounded bird trying to fly over a battlefield and finding no place to land to rest. Nice effect and really loved the poem.

    crb.

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  9. Hi there..

    I wandered on to this post from other blods and must say I am glad I did..thnks for the share..I loved the lines, the whole word play, not at all pretentious...

    I also write poems, You cld, if u wish visit my blog at www.versepoems.com

    ur opinion wld be invaluable..thnks.

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  10. Returning your visit and to answer your question: I have moved back to Montreal and teaching part time again. Qatar is a nice place to visit but not to live.... :)

    Anne-Marie

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  11. Great post. Let the dove fly free.

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  12. Dear bkm,
    Lovely -as always. Different though from your usual offerings. A bit more edgy.

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  13. An inforgettable poem! I see the white doves flying!

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  14. I agree...fly, dove fly. Well expressed sentiment!

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  15. thanks everyone....needed to excerise both side of the brain...and this one started elsewhere....but lead me to this....blessings...bkm

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  16. The struggle of freedom ... nicely done.

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  17. You had me at the first "dove" :) Good one!

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  18. You poem true ... I like the use of the dove and the artwork is stunning.

    Fine poem. Thank you! ... Poem on ...

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  19. beautiful highlight of your subject,
    love the image!

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  20. love the structure of the poem and very wonderfully written =)~

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  21. A strong lament for peace not flourishing. Do you know "We have gone too far; we do not know how to stop" by Edna St. Vincent Millay? yours reminds me of it.

    Mine fr the potluck is here: http://mairmusic.wordpress.com/2010/02/03/week-68/

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  22. thanks for sharing...
    Happy Monday!

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  23. "Fly on, little wing..." - Jimi Hendrix

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  24. I agree, let the dove fly free...a powerful write as always my friend. Loved the read xx

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  25. Sigh... fly free little one, a very symbolic poem, birds for centuries in almost all cultures are symbolic messengers of the Creator. Very creative write.

    Joanny
    http://thedowsersdaughter.blogspot.com/

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  26. Beautiful..what else to say...you have portrayed the struggle of the dove in such a way that even we feel like saying 'Dove fly ...,fly".

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  27. Oohh...this was a very poignant read, bkm... I liked how you made the analogy here... it was stinging, but very well done indeed!
    Thank you for sharing this poem with poetry potluck... it really was a rare treat!!!

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  28. This poem seems a little political to me am I reading that right?

    unqualified at peace negotiation,
    surrender squandered beneath an unmade bed;
    plucked barren
    seeing freedom only as needed -

    It seems to me that these lines are so current with the world right now.

    I will read this one again and again. Beautifully written.

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  29. Kristin - when I started it - it was an internal surrender to peace and took its voice to the external - it wanted to be heard....and yes can be read as such...thank you....bkm

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  30. "With hope springs promise" and I enjoyed the promise of another flight of imagination.. Thanks for sharing..


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