I left Walden Pond
and met you near the wood
you stood between
the moss and morning
in the shadow of the crest
there was a moment
one moment
where I could sense
more than I could see
my vision altered
by the pure completeness
I felt in loving thee
what sense- this sensibility?
worth a mere mortals thought-
if timelessness
not past through
with life’s full measure
left unsought
most travelers find no rest –
on such a road
without formal bedding
said I to the Raven –
“Call the night,
and this forest becomes my heaven.”
bkmackenzie
copyrighted 2008
Posted for the Poetry Pantry at Poets United
What a wonderful magical love poem in a classic style, and when I read it aloud the words flow beautifully.
ReplyDeletenice...there are at least a few references to some classics in your words today...nicely said...
ReplyDeletethanks Mary, this is one I always love to come back too...bkm
ReplyDeleteWonderful verse, enjoyed it very much :)
ReplyDelete...where I could sense
ReplyDeletemore than I could see…isn't it most of the time that way - we sense much more than we see..
Excellently written! Wonderful post! =)
ReplyDelete-Weasel
true words,
ReplyDeletelovely done..
we sense deeper, wider stuff than what we see.
agree.
What an utterly romantic poem! I love that you called the Raven! Great work, bkm!
ReplyDeleteThis is truly beautiful, such a wonderful romantic poem that you very nearly dance through such a lovely poetic song.
ReplyDeleteChanneling Dickinson today, my friend? I enjoyed this very much.
ReplyDeleteIf I could channel Dickinson - that I would do ... one of my favourites...bkm
ReplyDeleteand a bit of Poe, too? Beautiful poem. I am hoping to pick up some pointers from you on tapping my romantic side. I tend to run along dark rivers in my mind. Always a pleasure to read you. Thanks.
ReplyDeleteLiving and loving to the fullest so that you don't come to the end of your course to find you have not ran. I enjoyed reading this over and over until I got my own take on it...a very well done piece.
ReplyDeletei came searching for a 160 and found this instead...now you know i dont even need to comment...but it was so my kinda thing..excellent and i loved the last two lines...great stuff..pete
ReplyDeleteReally nice, and magical. Thanks
ReplyDeleteA haunting poem.
ReplyDeleteDear bkm...reminds me of a dream! Love this! And Walden Pond...and THAT pic!Ooohhhweee!
ReplyDeletethere was a moment
one moment
where I could sense
more than I could see
my vision altered
Oh very magical!
...you stood between the moss and the morning...great line. I LOVED this. It flows so beautifully and has so many layers. Just wonderful.
ReplyDeleteSigned...bkm this is simply an amazing poem. It is full of magic and beauty! :-)
ReplyDeleteI am so excited that so many love this piece..as I have stated earlier..it is one that I hold dear..Hearfelt thanks to you all...bkm
ReplyDeleteI love this! "you stood between the moss and morning" - brilliant line! I especially love your telling the Raven "call the night and this forest becomes my heaven." WOW!
ReplyDelete'you stood between the moss and morning,' so beautiful. I've been to walden pond and you've captured the love-poem feel of the place.
ReplyDeleteWonderful=D I love the dark feel portray within this poem =3
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