lets take a different
approach to rain - from storm to gentle shower
lets turn rain inside out/ view it with pleasure
and the ruffling of a skirt that is still
young and pressed
some laughter could turn it into wine
a falling window turn it into
reflection
reflection can simplify itself with
rumors, rumors of
a lover still caught in black and white photograph
1941 (pre-war)
pre-understanding that happy ever after movies
have many takes - many rewrites
and many critics -
i am not so sure about the rain or the wine (cut)
but i like that ruffling of the skirt
and the reflection of the photograph standing on the chest of drawers
ap-proach-able (adjective)
friendly and easy to talk to (pre-war)
bkmackenzie2018
Actually, pre-war has to be 1941, or earlier--but I really like the feel of your piece. Nostalgia burns like whale oil in secret chambers within. Old B/W conjure the past, movies and family albums. Even today, I always show the B/W version alongside my color digital images .
ReplyDeleteI fixed it Glenn thanks for pointing it out...bkm
DeleteI like the different approach to rain and this one specially:
ReplyDeletehappy ever after movies
have many takes - many rewrites
and many critics -
Happy new year!!!
I guess it's the farmer's daughter in me, but I love rain, whether I'm walking in a gentle shower or inside watching a downpour! I loved your consideration of rain and wine!
ReplyDeleteMy goodness this is beyond beautiful!!💜 I love rain and I love your poem even more!😊
ReplyDelete"understanding that happy ever after movies/have many takes - many rewrites/and many critics" - great lines. Thanks for sharing
ReplyDeleteThis was wonderful, rich imagery...
ReplyDeleteI love rain, your different approach and turning rain inside out. It’s my way of viewing rain! I especially enjoyed:
ReplyDelete‘some laughter could turn it into wine
a falling window turn it into
reflection’
and
‘…that ruffling of the skirt
and the reflection of the photograph standing on the chest of drawers’.
I love your wholly unique delicacy of structure would "turn rain inside out " in order to calibrate "that ruffling of the skirt" into "reflection" that can "simplify" -- yes, that's the task of poetry, to get three deep into substance to find the water, the air. Idiot note, a pre-war 1941 would have to be American, not Europe (which had been at it with Hitler since '39)--probably safer without a year at all. But all happy endings are fabrications, or those fabrications all we have left of them--like old movies, even history. Cheers friend --
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed this. I live where it rains a lot. My son, who was born and raised here, takes a different approach than I do. If it's raining, that's when he wants to go out, be in it. Me, I spend the rainy days longing for sunshine. Sometimes a different approach is a good thing.
ReplyDeletepre-understanding...great word. I like all the images it evokes. (K)
ReplyDeleteI love the great perspective you have painted here Barbara. Rain is not liked by many for many reasons, but this poem really does make you see it from a different view. Wonderful writing!!
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