succumbing to solitude
is what is needed
a bare floor - a set of salted beads
a closed vision exposes, filtered white
against inner
emptiness
one bead at a time
one layer at a time, ripped, torn
uneven
giving way as heavy
lifts light
the worn wood marks place
for two unfamiliar bones
i could kiss the offering
laid before me
all witness removed
bkmackenzie
2016
Poetry Panty - PoetsUnited.
is what is needed
a bare floor - a set of salted beads
a closed vision exposes, filtered white
against inner
emptiness
one bead at a time
one layer at a time, ripped, torn
uneven
giving way as heavy
lifts light
the worn wood marks place
for two unfamiliar bones
i could kiss the offering
laid before me
all witness removed
bkmackenzie
2016
Poetry Panty - PoetsUnited.
a closed vision exposes, filtered white
ReplyDeleteagainst inner
emptiness
one bead at a time
one layer at a time, ripped, torn
uneven
giving way as heavy
lifts light
Beautifully deep!
Thank you very much Sanna...bkm
DeleteI love the notion of "succumbing to solitude". My preferred state. So peaceful!
ReplyDeleteThank you very much Sherry. I love solitude also...bkm
DeleteThose moments of solitude can be the perfect moment really.
ReplyDeleteThey are perfect at the right time...bkm
DeleteWhoa!Reading it several times... still digesting. Very interesting theme and ending.
ReplyDeleteZQ
Thank you...bkm
DeleteJust you and the truth
ReplyDeleteThank you Martin for always visiting...bkm
DeleteLovely and meditative and soothing ... AND ... nuanced and intriguingly mysterious. Good writing!
ReplyDeleteThank you Wendy for reading and commenting...bkm
Deletein solitude we often can find pieces of ourselves.
ReplyDeleteSo true thank you...bkm
DeleteI would love to succumb to solitude both externally and internally...
ReplyDeleteYes if there we could find peace...bkm
DeleteHmmm, disturbing (even though I enjoy solitude).
ReplyDeleteI was thinking of "Enlightenment Guarenteed," a movie, your poem makes me think of it again.
ReplyDeleteWhat, I wonder, is keeping the speaker from kissing the offering?
ReplyDeleteThis is the question ...thank you...bkm
DeleteI agree with Rosemary that this is a bit disturbing...and I want to know the backstory!
ReplyDeleteSuch powerful imagery- i think there is a lot to be said for a bare floor and quietly working with beads.. it may seem cold to the outside world but in the right hands can be like a blank piece of paper..or a deep breath
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