Sunday, November 6, 2016

a clouded heart

do not reprimand me
i have been under the influence
the present moon has rendered me
speechless
and unquantifiable
as

human

i love you
more than a raining sky loves tears
mine
weeping warm
for a moon covered in the greys
of a clouded heart

how can you fault me for such

loving something so primal
as a moon

bkmackenzie
2016

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26 comments:

  1. AnonymousNovember 6, 2016 at 9:03 AM

    I love this poem.

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  2. brudbergNovember 6, 2016 at 9:25 AM

    This is magnificent... I do think love is both as simple as this, and at the same time twice as complicated.

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  3. Sumana RoyNovember 6, 2016 at 9:38 AM

    "... a moon covered in the greys

    of a clouded heart"...so beautifully put...

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  4. Kerry O'ConnorNovember 6, 2016 at 9:59 AM

    Beautiful work. I so admire the phrasing, the pace and the eloquent expression of thought.

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  5. JulianNovember 6, 2016 at 11:15 AM

    An enjoyable read, how the moon palys such an important part of our emotional being

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  6. Sherry Blue SkyNovember 6, 2016 at 12:59 PM

    Oh, this is wonderful. I especially love the raining sky loving tears. Wow!

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  7. AnonymousNovember 6, 2016 at 4:10 PM

    Beautiful expression

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  8. MaryNovember 6, 2016 at 4:35 PM

    Beautifully expressed. I think there is something to be said for loving something so primal as the moon!

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  9. Sherry Blue SkyNovember 6, 2016 at 5:00 PM

    I especially love " I love you more than a raining sky loves tears". Perfect.

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  10. Brother OllieNovember 6, 2016 at 5:30 PM

    I haven't read your work in many months, maybe years, it is sublime. I've missed it, and glad I came back today to read this piece.

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    1. signed...bkmNovember 6, 2016 at 6:02 PM

      Thank you Brother Ollie. Glad I came back and glad you are back...bkm

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  11. AnonymousNovember 6, 2016 at 6:11 PM

    Loved it... wonderfully crafted.

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  12. Sanaa RizviNovember 7, 2016 at 1:54 AM

    Gosh ❤️I absolutely adore the images of "i love you more than a raining sky loves tears mine weeping warm for a moon covered in the greys of a clouded heart" Sigh.. beautifully penned ❤️

    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

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  13. Magical Mystical TeacherNovember 7, 2016 at 9:49 AM

    The answer to the final question is simple: Finding fault is something that some of us do best, because it's so easy!

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  14. Rosemary Nissen-WadeNovember 9, 2016 at 3:01 AM

    Lovely words.

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  15. Old EggNovember 10, 2016 at 7:01 PM

    Why not? The moon, the trees and rivers flowing, how can we not talk to them and thank them for making our world so beautiful

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  16. JerryNovember 12, 2016 at 5:20 AM

    I don't fault you.

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