in the hand
of a smaller morning, i would
not be so taken
in the realm
of corners white, i would
not so have fallen
but this morning
is fragrant towards an evening remembered - of
corners glided with breezes
revelations of sky
wide (not) enough to hold thoughts
of you, sunrise blue (not)
enough to touch the filling
of a heart, nor the red
of my rapture
against the salver of the
day
bkmackenzie
copyrighted 2012
October Morning by Shawn Zents
posted for d'Verse - Open Link
beautiful opening stanza.
ReplyDeletelovely imagery throughout...really enjoyed this.
Gorgeous--sucked me in with the first image, and never let go.
ReplyDeletehow wonderful, you've captured delicate thoughts for a quiet morning.
ReplyDeletei like how your opening lines play off the wideness, the blueness later...i think i would be rather taken as well...smiles.
ReplyDeleteexquisite...I too am enamored of the opening...beautiful through to the end...just beautiful!
ReplyDeleteIn the hand of a smaller morning...know that line is going to stick with me. Beautifully painted.
ReplyDeleteMy God, this is beautiful. The (not)s really got to me. The opening is lovely and spanking white; the blue... the palette of not only colors, but emotions, so lovely. Thank you so much for this. Amy (dversed today, too!)
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Thank you so much for you time and comments...blessings..bkm
Deletei agree the opening stanza is sublime
ReplyDeletefour child with book senryu
A perfect little poem that perfumes a completely overwhelming emotional experience.
ReplyDeletebeautifully emotional!
ReplyDeleteAs tender as the morn.
ReplyDeletea beautiful day/feeling
ReplyDeleteThis is lovely...all of it. I am very fond of the last stanza "wide (not) enough to hold thoughts...against the salver of the day." Powerful words.
ReplyDeleteJust such a perfect flow of words and feeling.
ReplyDeleteI know I can always find writing here that is original and deep. great imagery is always found in your work.
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