Tuesday, July 24, 2012

in the hand of a smaller morning





in the hand
of a smaller morning, i would
not be so taken

in the realm
of corners white, i would
not so have fallen

but this morning
is fragrant towards an evening remembered - of
corners glided with breezes
revelations of sky

wide (not) enough to hold thoughts
of you, sunrise blue (not)
enough to touch the filling
of a heart, nor the red
of my rapture
against the salver of the
day

bkmackenzie
copyrighted 2012

October Morning by Shawn Zents
posted for d'Verse - Open Link

16 comments:

  1. beautiful opening stanza.

    lovely imagery throughout...really enjoyed this.

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  2. Gorgeous--sucked me in with the first image, and never let go.

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  3. how wonderful, you've captured delicate thoughts for a quiet morning.

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  4. i like how your opening lines play off the wideness, the blueness later...i think i would be rather taken as well...smiles.

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  5. exquisite...I too am enamored of the opening...beautiful through to the end...just beautiful!

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  6. In the hand of a smaller morning...know that line is going to stick with me. Beautifully painted.

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  7. My God, this is beautiful. The (not)s really got to me. The opening is lovely and spanking white; the blue... the palette of not only colors, but emotions, so lovely. Thank you so much for this. Amy (dversed today, too!)
    http://sharplittlepencil.com/2012/07/24/real-women-dverse/

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    1. Thank you so much for you time and comments...blessings..bkm

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  8. A perfect little poem that perfumes a completely overwhelming emotional experience.

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  9. This is lovely...all of it. I am very fond of the last stanza "wide (not) enough to hold thoughts...against the salver of the day." Powerful words.

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  10. Just such a perfect flow of words and feeling.

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  11. I know I can always find writing here that is original and deep. great imagery is always found in your work.

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