i can tell you
i have lived, i can tell you
i have loved
i can tell you to live
and to love - but not as i
for age to age we
gather different seeds
and walk unfamiliar roads
yours may be a little harder, or shorter
mine fading as the sound of my voice
but i have loved, and lived
and traveled enough
for one lifetime, and i am tired
and well enough
the rain falls today, and well enough
i have loved, and lived
bkmackenzie
copyrighted 2011
One Shoot Sunday at One Stop Poetry Greg Laychak
"for age to age we
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and walk unfamiliar roads"
How true and stated eloquently. A great challenge response that takes into account individual differences.
....and that says it all: I have lived and loved... What more can one ask for?
ReplyDeleteBarbara,
ReplyDeleteI've been spending this many years trying to learn how to do both.
Trulyfool
This poems gets very much across to the reader in a few deceptively simple lines, wisdom and humility, sorrow and beauty, a tender confluence of a fading voice, the cycle of life and the coming and going of rains.
ReplyDeleteBeautifully written and felt. More than well enough.
ReplyDeleteThis touched me because it made me think of my parents. They are both gone now but I am happy that they lived their life to the fullest- most of the time.
ReplyDeleteNo matter to what age one gets to survive to, to have, as you say, lived and loved in full measure is enough to call it a life. That image of an antiseptic cold hospital/hospice hallway must have stirred all sorts of recent memories for you. - Brendan
ReplyDeletethank you ...loved it
ReplyDeleteVery touching! At the end, I hope I am satisfied that I lived my life to the fullest, with no regrets.
ReplyDeleteThis sounds like my mother, and her mother before her. She's 87, growing more frail each day, still with a bit of spirit but feeling more and more tired.
ReplyDeleteWell done, B.K.
i love the gathering of seeds and walking unfamiliar roads in your poem barbara - and the i have loved and lived..so true..and hope i can say this as well when i finally get there
ReplyDeleteYes, she lived and loved..but unfortunately this one did not get to do it "her way". God bless her and all who did. Very well written and hopeful. Thank you, Gay
ReplyDeletemmmm...I like the confidence is her voice - I have worked with the elderly for a long time and you've captured their thoughts and strong will perfectly.
ReplyDeleteWe each greet the road to life a different way - what is mine may not be yours, but enjoy it for what it is. Enjoy the experience of being, of walking that unique path...a strong, confident characterization, and nice to see a life lived without regret. Beautiful.
ReplyDeletea touching and beautiful message...if only everyone was as lucky to know what it means to live one's life and to know love--both given and received...
ReplyDeleteA lovely and deceptively simple take on the prompt-- thanks. xxxj
ReplyDelete"..and well enough..." deep and true insights here, barbara, strongly in touch with the human in us that over-rides the external, and the acceptance and calm that can come when the storm is past.
ReplyDeleteLovely piece.
ReplyDeleteSimply beautiful!
ReplyDeleteyour opening lines swallowed me right in.
ReplyDeleteNice advice to pass on.
ReplyDeleteto have lived and loved..what we all hope to say when reflecting...beautifully done ~
ReplyDeleteI've worked with the elderly too, still do, a bit........and each single person sitting in their wheelchair, or recliner, has such an amazing story to tell. I love this poem, it is very touching.
ReplyDeleteI admit this was a hard prompt...almost did not do it...but there are all aspects to life and aging is one of them...thank for stopping everyone to read, I truly appreciate your time...bkm
ReplyDeleteSo much to share and so much to learn from them....Yet we don't have time for them...
ReplyDeleteSuch a moving piece...
a statement
Dear bkm,
ReplyDeleteI feel a sigh at the end of your pen...I too have lived and loved.
But perhaps not like you.
Live and let love.
ReplyDeleteI'm following your blog.
ReplyDeleteRich!
ReplyDeleteA lovely life indeed Bkm....love this!! :-)
ReplyDeleteGood, relatable.
ReplyDeleteWell, Barbara...me, too! Just about everything I hear from others--I been there, etc.
ReplyDeletePEACE!