Monday, April 11, 2011

coupled strength....Shadorma



i.

in the end
a candle will light
and lead me
towards night
to the door from where I came
to sip wine longer

ii

it the swell
of wines calming breath
held in love
held in length
that warms the heart in the night
coupled by loves strength


bkmackenzie
copyrighted 2011

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35 comments:

  1. hedgewitchApril 11, 2011 at 2:50 PM

    Quite nice on the form, barbara, and the mood is pensive and reflective, leaving a vintage bouquet on the palate.

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  2. Gemma WisemanApril 11, 2011 at 3:25 PM

    The rapturous enigma of wine is beautifully captured!

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  3. Brian MillerApril 11, 2011 at 3:37 PM

    nice feel esp in the second verse...

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  4. AnonymousApril 11, 2011 at 3:43 PM

    stunning.....

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  5. Helena WhiteApril 11, 2011 at 4:26 PM

    Striking....♥ ஆ

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  6. Uma AnandaneApril 11, 2011 at 5:38 PM

    Nice and smooth.Well written Shadorma!

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  7. BeachannyApril 11, 2011 at 6:08 PM

    Wine perhaps as more than wine..a symbol for so much and beautifully expressed here in your two shadormas. Well written as always. Gay

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  8. UnknownApril 11, 2011 at 7:06 PM

    A beautiful piece as all of your work is.....

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  9. MaureenApril 11, 2011 at 7:19 PM

    Lovely, Barbara, especially the first piece.

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  10. LisaApril 11, 2011 at 7:36 PM

    Nicely written.

    Lisa
    InspiredbyLisa

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  11. signed...bkmApril 11, 2011 at 8:16 PM

    thank you all..I could not really tell if those we tea candles in the wine glass... and being two of them..thoughts pulled to double everything...bkm

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  12. The UnknowngnomeApril 11, 2011 at 8:23 PM

    Light and wine, the c(o)upp(l)ed blood of Love.

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  13. dsApril 11, 2011 at 9:29 PM

    Just beautiful...a poem to get lost in. Thank you.

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  14. MartinApril 11, 2011 at 11:57 PM

    Very nice, reflective piece.

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  15. anthonynorthApril 12, 2011 at 1:03 AM

    This is beautifully written.

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  16. Isabel DoyleApril 12, 2011 at 4:48 AM

    the swell of wine's calming breath - lovely lines

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  17. LynApril 12, 2011 at 6:06 AM

    This wraps itself around me..lovely!

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  18. AnonymousApril 12, 2011 at 6:56 AM

    beautiful!

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  19. Doctor FTSEApril 12, 2011 at 10:52 AM

    A lovely poem.
    (Should not the first word of the second stanza be "it's" rather than "it"?)

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  20. OliviaApril 12, 2011 at 11:02 AM

    Wonderful! Very well composed. The words slipped by like those joyful times!

    Hugs x

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  21. Lorenzo — Alchemist's PillowApril 12, 2011 at 2:55 PM

    Beautifully done. I found the first piece to be especially evocative, Each line seems to bring a surprise that then instantly makes perfect sense.

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  22. ReflectionsApril 12, 2011 at 9:34 PM

    Reflective, evocative piece. Stunning!

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  23. Marilyn & JeffApril 12, 2011 at 10:13 PM

    A lovely gentle piece.

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  24. Brigid O'ConnorApril 12, 2011 at 11:41 PM

    A warm, relective piece.

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  25. Everyday GoddessApril 13, 2011 at 5:46 AM

    velvety smooth writing.

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  26. hyperCRYPTICalApril 13, 2011 at 1:02 PM

    Beautifully done!

    Anna :o]

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  27. Tess KincaidApril 13, 2011 at 3:30 PM

    Lovely. It left me feeling warm and relaxed.

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  28. MargaretApril 13, 2011 at 7:37 PM

    The Shadorma is rather nice as it allows you a little more play than a haiku. I really liked "..the swell of wines calming breath".

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  29. Tumblewords:April 13, 2011 at 9:36 PM

    How very lovely!!

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  30. TrellissimoApril 15, 2011 at 10:24 AM

    Nice, quiet thoughts.

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  31. JinksyApril 15, 2011 at 1:32 PM

    The shadorma works so well here.

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  32. Steve IsaakApril 15, 2011 at 5:53 PM

    Amazing, wonderful work - no surprise, coming from you.

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  33. LouiseApril 16, 2011 at 12:09 PM

    Quite beautiful, almost serene, tranquil and absolutely wonderful.

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  34. Carrie Van HornApril 16, 2011 at 10:06 PM

    A beautiful and strong poem Bkm....I always love what you write!! I hope that your husband is doing okay....please let me know...prayers will continue...:-)

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  35. Vinay Leo R.April 17, 2011 at 9:54 AM

    oh that first verse just takes the cake :) I loved where you've taken the image; in both takes! Nice one Mackie! :)

    My Magpie Post

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