Tuesday, January 18, 2011
layers
i.
tragedy visited here
acceptance did not follow
cut they did her birthright, her hair
yet, she skated in memory
of its bloom
while the ice slowly melted
and life took exit
of the room
ii.
she took a pen name
and po box in a neighboring town
"your Mr. Carroll has many fans," said the postmaster
"and you?" he added..
"i am just his secretary," she replied
"and your name madame secretary?"
"sir, my name bears no significance."
iii.
her passions were
canopied beneath petticoats
and proper performance, held
to private viewing
only within the mirrors of modesty
and girlish
self-discovery
bkmackenzie
copyrighted 2011
Posted for Magpie Tales
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This is lovely, I love the skating metaphors and the flirtations of self and discovering the requirements of society!
ReplyDeletethank you Ellen....blessings and thanks for the follow...bkm
ReplyDeleteshe sounds quite the character...and perhaps created a few in her writing...
ReplyDeletehmmm am wondering if there's an Alice reference in there somewhere, or something more Russian...regardless, the poem lives up to the title, with ruffled layers of identity and discovery.
ReplyDeleteno Alice here Hedge...more Russian yes(my slavic maiden name is showing) three sisters, three lives, layered within a pasted time....thank you...bkm
ReplyDeletebkm,
ReplyDeletethree alike in their differences....
rel
Barbara, I think this is one of your best poems yet. Great drama and atmosphere, powerful yet soft, thoughtful layout.
ReplyDeleteFancy submitting some poems to Catapult to Mars?
Dear Barbara: Great flow and the unravelling of this "person non grata" by way of societal "norms". I particularly love
ReplyDelete"her passions were
canopied beneath petticoats
and proper performance,"
Feel a lot of steam heat coming from underneath those never seen by society "petticoats". For this reason this poem gets a HoT rating!Creative +++!!!
What a lovely, delicate and haunting poem!
ReplyDeleteI have been trying to figure out 'who'?
But it covers more than just one culture....and time.
It's a lovely, haunting piece of work, and the delicacy is still enticing.
Yes, beautifully layered.
Lady Nyo
Barbara,
ReplyDeleteI like this unassuming lady with a life 'inside'.
I'm just the reader of her biographer's peek at her. Very much an audience to her stage presence.
TFool
i wonder who you write about... this was a difficult time for women and your poem captures this so well
ReplyDeleteeach life had the same beginnings yet very different endings it seems...this was like three magnificent flash fictions, I enjoyed them a lot.
ReplyDeletein the picture
ReplyDeletethe dead keeping perfectly still
in your words
so alive
three unique women reflecting those times of
ReplyDeletehidden desires...well done
I like the way you explored them as individuals - one of the most interesting interpretations I've seen.
ReplyDeleteKat
thank you everyone....I saw these three women as individual layers or as layers of one soul...blessings...bkm
ReplyDeleteLove the layers in this one Bkm....amazing as always! :-)
ReplyDeleteSO you're a historian, a feminist, AND a poet. I'm never going to be able to leave this blog...lol...
ReplyDeleteI've subscribed.
Just my cup of tea.
thank you Heather...you have made my evening and thank you for reading some for the older pieces...you are welcome here anytime for poetry or tea....blessings..bkm
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