Friday, January 14, 2011

Blue Rhapsody






in the shadow of
white winged  windows
and sacrilegious mountains
vespers rang out
i could not hold note
to your Agnus Dei  in perfect pitch
so with my eleisons seemingly
going unheard -  i left the service
of both church and man
remastered an earlier recording
of Verde's Requiem
and took up
co-habitation with a poodle
and a Gershwin
look alike

bkmackenzie
copyrighted 2011

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21 comments:

  1. HelenJanuary 14, 2011 at 3:53 PM

    I had a hard time measuring up to the standards of my church ... this sounds familiar. Great write!!

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  2. Brian MillerJanuary 14, 2011 at 7:41 PM

    a poodle and gershwin look alike...smiles. i understand...we are in the process of finding a new church...

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  3. moondustwriterJanuary 14, 2011 at 9:07 PM

    Ha that is cute

    the poodle and the gershwin i think are doing a jig

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  4. TrulyfoolJanuary 14, 2011 at 9:35 PM

    Barbara,

    You could do worse than Gershwin! He wouldn't ask your prayers -- just make you happy.

    Trulyfool

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  5. UnknownJanuary 14, 2011 at 9:42 PM

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  6. KavitaJanuary 14, 2011 at 9:44 PM

    As poignant a read as only you could deliver, bkm!
    Much liked!

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  7. KavitaJanuary 14, 2011 at 9:45 PM

    Wheeww!! That was tight... I had to Wiki some of the terms here.. but I think I got the essence right (or so I hope)
    When faith takes a hike, one really needs to find shelter in simpler things..
    A very well written piece

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  8. AndreasJanuary 15, 2011 at 2:54 AM

    i love this, start to finish. :)

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  9. Lucy WestenraJanuary 15, 2011 at 5:53 AM

    I never found a Church in the first place. Have I been lucky?

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  10. Myrna R.January 15, 2011 at 7:15 AM

    What a wonderful way to express exit from religion. Wonderful poem.

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  11. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallJanuary 15, 2011 at 9:15 AM

    inspiring words.
    well done.

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  12. hedgewitchJanuary 15, 2011 at 12:38 PM

    Elegantly stated, with a barb of true wit at the end. And I don't just say that because I agree so wholeheartedly with the sentiments.

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  13. Dulçe ♥January 15, 2011 at 1:39 PM

    this is music to my ears Bkm

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  14. MaggieJanuary 15, 2011 at 4:55 PM

    Wonderful feel to this. Terrific.

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  15. Jim SwindleJanuary 15, 2011 at 6:51 PM

    The poem's clear and clever. I would hope, however, that you some day discover that there's much more to Jesus than the rules and rituals that bound you.

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  16. signed...bkmJanuary 15, 2011 at 7:39 PM

    rest assured, lack of faith in church and man is not lack of faith in God....bkm

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  17. Kat MortensenJanuary 16, 2011 at 6:24 AM

    I like this - has a "Sound of Music" feel to begin with and turns it on its ear.
    The Gershwin-dog is one of the best of many great bits - eleisons is such a mellifluous word.

    Kat

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  18. JinksyJanuary 16, 2011 at 6:54 AM

    with my eleisons seemingly
    going unheard

    Doesn't that often seem the way of things? LOL :)

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  19. Kathe W.January 16, 2011 at 7:57 AM

    yes- I'd rather just go outside and admire a tree....well said

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  20. Tess KincaidJanuary 17, 2011 at 6:30 AM

    Oh, I can so relate to this piece. I love "sacrilegious mountains". Sounds like you are in a far better spot.

    I adore my good friend Edna St. Vee on your sidebar!

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  21. LydiaJanuary 18, 2011 at 1:26 AM

    I relate too!
    I so love your reference to your poodle. I have a Standard, chocolate color. She is wonderful.

    This post was wonderful!

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