There stands two trees tall, forever green
beside the cottage behind the house
a door through which you have not seen
a long stone hearth that holds a self, a place
of promise called by night
and lost within a winter storm
that left a message cold and white, where mother says
I was born.
On such a day that too was blessed
with snow and flake - cold but fine
and through this world I came to
wonder What was Gods and What was mine
I danced between those two pines
that laughed in summer and the spring
when autumn came, I too came to ponder
what the future, its new year would bring...
I grew and watched the hearth give life
to children younger then myself
and knew the blessings of my
mother would last forever as my wealth,
of home and family
of hearth and heart
and what it could or could not give
and when the time is right for me to marry,
it is there I first will live
bkmackenzie
copyrighted 2010
ah this was wonderful to read....just lovely. I love the rhythm of your words.
ReplyDeleteVery touching feeling of nostalgia to be preserved. A fleeting moment that would just pass us by if not taken cognizance of. Beautiful!
ReplyDeletethank you so much kathe...a little old fashion, but it was the first thing that came to mind...bkm
ReplyDeletethank you Kaykuala...for stopping in - so nice to meet you you are always welcome here...bkm
ReplyDeleteWonderful tribute to the place of your birth. Exquisite.
ReplyDeleteA lovely flow of language. And I can see you dancing between the pines!
ReplyDeleteBeautifully written between two trees. Thank you
ReplyDeleteSo elegant! wonderful writing
ReplyDeletecheers :)
I just love to to read you, lady
ReplyDeleteonce and again... i want to live there too. married or not ;)
smiles.lovely read...hope and expectation...
ReplyDeleteThis is absolutely lovely. Thanks.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful rhythm and reads like a poem from another time. Just lovely.
ReplyDeleteA sense of continuity, of love and family persisting through time. I liked this image "lost within a winter storm
ReplyDeletethat left a message cold and white..." the message written in snow... Very neat turn of phrase.
This is beautiful ......
ReplyDeleteyou are a lovely writer
ReplyDeleteI love the continuity in this piece, the flow and gentle rhythm of wondering and surety. Very nice!
ReplyDeleteThere's such elegance to your words. Delightfully enchanting.
ReplyDeleteThis poem "dances" very gracefully. Even after three read-throughs. Not because I didn't understand it, but in hopes of some of this wonderful skill sinking in to my brain. Thank you!
ReplyDeleteA lovely read.
ReplyDeletespeaks of home and hope - a very enjoyable read
ReplyDeletemusical flow.
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing.
So much beauty in this one..thank you!!
ReplyDeleteReading that aloud really adds to the timelessness of your verse. I read that you felt it a little old fashioned but I don't feel that at all. It is romantic like a gossimer thread that connects us from one period to another. From one mother to another and another. It is what we learn there that builds that hearth and heart.
ReplyDeletetruly a musical delight
ReplyDeletewonderful
this is so beautiful and hopeful...much of your heart lies here. Within the walls, within the words.
ReplyDeleteLovely writing, very nostalgic feel to this piece, Warm and welcoming. Made me feel good reading it.
ReplyDeleteOh! This is breathtaking. And the rhythm of it just gets inside my head. You create such a strong sense of place and character. Beautiful!
ReplyDeleteThis is just so perfect! I love the strong sense of home and family you've created.
ReplyDeleteThis is beautiful. I love your writing it is so creative and sensitive.
ReplyDeleteTwo trees tall...wonderful imagery including that of mother and daughter.
ReplyDeleteThat's really lovely.
ReplyDeleteA beautiful piece.
ReplyDeleteDear bkm: This is truly a fine poem! Great imagery, structure; majestic in every way like the fine pine tree! Particularly love these lines;
ReplyDelete"grew and watched the hearth give life
to children younger then myself
and knew the blessings of my
mother would last forever as my wealth"
How rich! Thank-you!
Beautifully flowing. I love the nostalgic look back and, most especially, the last few lines. Wonderful poem!
ReplyDeleteTakes me to a wholesome world full of simple dreams and hope. :)
ReplyDeleteThis is very sweet, light hearted a beautiful read for the end of my hectic day
ReplyDeleteThis swirls just like a snowflake--and has as many facets. Thanks so much for sharing this lovely piece.
ReplyDeleteThis is so very lovely...
ReplyDelete'I danced between those two pines' - your words are very beautiful.
Bkm....this is wonderful....i love the look back of your birth home,life, and mother's legacy...another glorious poem by you!! :-)
ReplyDeleteThis was such a delightfully musical read...
ReplyDeleteTo me, it sang hope, gratitude and LIFE! Lovely!