Tuesday, September 14, 2010

Long Sought...





















do not love me like another or one with feathered hat you bought
love me like the lover your heart has for so long sought

take me to the morning, the one the dawn has yet to kiss,
take me there, there where long since lovers in forever reminisce
held between the moon and midnight, between the stars and eternity
holding my name as your next breathe - is held in sweetest ecstasy...

do not love me like another or one with feathered hat you bought
love me like the lover your heart has for so long sought

give me but the moments that write volumes without end
suspend the everafter knowing full well it shall not come again
let me read within your eyes the words your silent lips dare not address
and press them to the pages that my life will inscribe as - its happiness

no, do not love me like another or one with feathered hat you bought
love me like the lover your heart has for so long now - sought....

bkmackenzie
copyrighted 2010

posted for One Shot Wednesday.... Where Poets and Writers Meet

photo of Fay Wray

48 comments:

  1. King Kong could have not picked a more beautiful Woman to capture and you could not have written a more beautiful poem.

    I really loved this line
    "take me to the morning, the one the dawn has yet to kiss, "

    The imagery it evokes is so passionate. When i read your poetry it always makes me want to write better than I have. Thank you for sharing BKM.

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  2. What a beautiful poem, gorgeous refrain and truer than true sentiment. I love it.

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  3. i love the vibrancy of the feeling, sounds great to read aloud too.

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  4. thank you all so very much.....i too think this is one to be read aloud..angin thank you...bkm

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  5. that last stanza before the refrain is brilliant...reading in your eyes, pressing to pages...love it...i also like the refrain through out as it ties the piece together well. happy one shot!

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  6. If only wishes like came true... well HERE they are about to bloom, from your herat to ours, which is much more than enough...
    Brilliant.

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  7. thank you Brian and Dulce... looking forward to reading all the One Shots....bkm

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  8. Very beautiful. Well written and emotional.

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  9. A desire - almost a command - combined into a beautiful love song. Wonderful poem.

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  10. Such lovely lines. "between the stars and eternity
    holding my name as your next breathe - is held in sweetest ecstasy..." Feeling shines through the words

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  11. This is wonderful! I can hear Leonard Cohen singing these lyrics.

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  12. ahhh and you strike lady! absolutely marvelous read!

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  13. Such passion...
    (And...A Man And A Woman and Love Actually are two of my all-time favorite films as well!)

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  14. Yes, Willow I agree read out loud in a deep voice.... Everyone thank you and please feel free to fall in love --everyday.... Timoteo...love the music too from both films....bkm

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  15. beautiful beautiful beautiful :)

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  16. Yes. This is heartfelt and feels like a song. I like the recurring refrain. Well done. Thank you. Gay (@beachanny)

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  17. Beautiful and wonderfully written, my friend:D~ freedom to love!XD

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  18. take me to the morning, the one the dawn has yet to kiss, - incredible line. This is beautiful.

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  19. bkm, the flow was so beautiful and the words so lyrical...it was a pure delight to read.

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  20. Bkm amazing lines and this are the kind of words that make me watch films...

    "do not love me like another or one with feathered hat you bought
    love me like the lover your heart has for so long sought"

    Beautiful~

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  21. thanks you everyone..for your comments..
    Wild Rose I am so pleased you like that line...the old films do come to mind...they are poetry in their own right...that feed the soul...bkm

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  22. Beautiful...I love the refrain and its shift at the end--love it all. Thank you.

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  23. these words of yours speaks volume "no, do not love me like another or one with feathered hat you bought
    love me like the lover your heart has for so long now- sought"

    Cheers!

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  24. As a matter of fact i will quote that line i highlighted on my twitter page and of course will credit via @BKM, i just love that line and am sending it to my muse :)

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  25. Its beautiful BKM. Let me read within your eyes, words.... what a lovely way to say it.
    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya

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  26. Sizzling. This is a great. Love and Light, Sender

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  27. I can tell you this is beautiful and passionate with the voice of Plath or Millay. Love the repetition, a nice subtle command at the end.

    Thank you for stopping by and joining my blog!

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  28. I felt the plea stronger with each refrain

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  29. Interesting that the rhymes are in pairs but you didn't separate them all into twos. It read much better that way (or so I imagine) and I like the turned-around repetition for the last two lines.

    Nice one, bkm!

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  30. I love the defiance in your voice. Love is not about settling.

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  31. This is the most beautiful love poem I have read in ages. It touched me deeply. Thank you.

    My One Shot is HERE.

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  32. Monkey Man...you have made my day...thank you...bkm

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  33. for a minute i was lost in the photo and the make up of her eyes...i could so see anna tronic from the scissor sisters!!!! moving on however yet again you have written such wonderful flowing words..and i love the start and finish,,captivating..yep back to that photo again..cheers pete

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  34. love the feathered hat... beautiful.

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  35. very beautifully constructed work.
    Thanks for sharing!

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  36. Unique love poem, using the feather hat --- it creates a mystique --- very lyrical -- smooth and lovely to read.

    cheers,
    Joanny

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  37. An invocation or aspiration to be the one "not... like another" or "one with feathered hat" (a nice bit of the concrete amidst the abstract). This would be a great poem for a group discussion. I think it demands more than one reading.

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  38. thank you...linda, joanny, and peter..glad you like the photo..Miss Wray..seemed to fit the character..protrayed in the poem...

    maureen...thank you ...your words are taken to heart..love your poetry...bkm

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  39. so romantic! How do you do it, bkm?

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  40. Pulled at my heartstrings, bkm. Lovely!

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  41. This reminds me somehow of an ancient ballad or troubadour song-- lovely flow to the words1
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  42. I love the demand she places on the love.
    True love is equal to the demand.

    Beautifully wrought piece my friend

    thanks one again for the wonderful Autumn poem you shared with One Stop

    Love from the Moon

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  43. Don't we all wish for this! (sigh)..
    Your wordplay and the form used totally blew me away!
    It was fantastic.. and the repetition of those line really added to the effect..

    Very well played, bkm...
    Thanks for sharing it here..

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  44. Great structure and beautiful phrases. Once again a great addition to One Shot. Everyone looks to be a special love, not one that is "loved like another". Can't wait to read next weeks poem.

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