on the table a dryed out pen
thoughts weep from the stone wall
staining the mosiac
a crack in the door, reveals only
eyes seeking truth
as bells ringout to the blessed
there is no ear - to hear..
Hermes has gone missing....
bkmackenzie
copyrighted 2010
Posted for One Shot Wednesday...
nice hermes reference...had so many jobs i wonder which one is delinquent...smiles. good job writing anyway. nice one shot...
ReplyDeleteThat was something to read. Nice job. I am new at Poets United. A pleasure to find poems like this. I'm Square Corner. My friends call me SC
ReplyDelete"thoughts weep from the stone wall
ReplyDeletestaining the mosiac" love that line ...bkm
And agree with Brian about the Hermes reference. Excellent poem, conjures many ideas and images in few lines.
"thoughts weep from the stone wall....." Good poem!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful message dear signed...bkm,profound and simply penetrating the mind..love it :) well done!
ReplyDeletenice oneshot bkm
ReplyDeleteYou captured so much in so few words, bkm. The Hermes line just adds the perfect touch to the scene you so artfully crafted.
ReplyDeleteWonderful. I read it out loud. Twice.
ReplyDeleteOh the pain of writer's block..thoughts weeping, blank pages, dried up pens..know that and been there..the urge to walk away and wonder if any of it is original or fresh. Good poem. Very evocative. Thanks.
ReplyDeleteSome excellent lines in this one. And it is something that afflicts many writers so often.
ReplyDeleteSo jealous now! You write real good, my friend. ;)
ReplyDeleteHermes has gone missing....really nails it! Brilliant!
ReplyDeleteLove this BKM... I was having a horrible writing day yesterday and feel this poem big time. The Hermes reference as has been mentioned is brilliant. Be Inspired Today! Love and Light, Sender
ReplyDeleteA perfect caption for the picture. One senses the past presence (passed present?) of people there.
ReplyDeleteI like this. Good writing.
ReplyDeletehermes has gone missing….i like the atmosphere you create with your words dear bkm
ReplyDeleteThoughts weeping from the wall and no Hermes to record them. Lovely imagery. That Hermes! He's probably showing someone around the Underworld.
ReplyDeleteWonder who lived there once... Will they return? Ever?
ReplyDeleteA very nicely done ambiguity here...
Really enjoyed the read... the Hermes touch was brilliant!
just wonderful
ReplyDeleteAlways enjoy your posts. Excellent craft and creativity
ReplyDeleteVery suggestive in its simplicity. Solid. - Bill
ReplyDeleteAwesome and very profound..loved the imagery my friend. Loved it.
ReplyDeleteGreat poem. I just love the imagery in the beginning, "thoughts weep from the stone walls." Excellent.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful poem. And I feel like a broken record, but I really liked the Hermes reference. It was a thought provoking poem. Ok no I'm off to ponder the message of your poem. Until next week!
ReplyDeleteIt's a bad day when the stone walls are having writer's block
ReplyDeletenicely conveyed
sorry I came yesterday and was unable to comment
Great One Shot
Moon hugs
i think most people have picked up on "thoughts weep through stone walls" and the hermes reference..a very short piece that said so much and was written excellently..cheers and great to see you again at one shot..pete
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