i
am not here to tell you exactly what went on that night, but i am here to tell
you the truth. at least as much of truth as i can tell and
that's all the truth i know. well it started to rain in the south
with a sky warm and still going
blue-black fast. the wind picked up in that dust bowl kind of
way that blew through the calm like an open window on a Oklahoma Sunday, then there was the lightening to the tree about a
mile away that fluttered the screen-door having Sarah’s cat running to the barn
as if pursued by Frank Jefferey's German Shepard Buggerbad. when far away
an interrupted cry showed the face
of a girl that spoke to God… everything stopped and a rainbow covered the earth she just laughed and smiled right at me….
bkmackenzie 2019
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I LOVE this... the image, the voice. You are a natural at this. Well done.
ReplyDeletethank you Margaret i love the unsophisticated voice...bkm
DeleteI love the juxtaposition of hint and vivid detail in your piece, Barbara, such as the ‘sky warm and still going blue-black fast’ and the wind blowing ‘through the calm like an open window on a Oklahoma Sunday’. The movement of the cat is an excellent touch – and then the rainbow.
ReplyDeletethank you Kim...this was a fun write looking for to the next Prosery...bkm
DeleteLove your detailed explanation, putting me right there with you. There is a mystery with your piece, the face of a girl that spoke to God.
ReplyDeleteyou are right Grace...life is a full fledged mystery...bkm
DeleteI like how redemption came through a smiling girl, bringing a rainbow.
ReplyDeletewe never know now redemption will come...thank you...bkm
DeleteLove the photo and the imagery of your prosery :)
ReplyDeletethank you so much lynn...bkm
DeleteThis is just perfect... the somewhat mysterious yet so vivid with details. So perfect in place and time, and with enough left unsaid for the reader to fill in.
ReplyDeletethank you very much Bjorn..nothing like a good mystery...bkm
DeleteA wonderfully strange but positive enigmatic tale Babara. Loved it!
ReplyDeletethank you Rob..always good to hear from you...bkm
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