I can not say
about Hamburg
or Prague
for I did not know
You there
though I knew
rain
It was not
the rain
Where I first
caught sight of
You cloaked tartan
and turned
to the
Shop display
Not me, allowing
that, My
Desire all the
More set
on our
Meeting and acquaintance
A Desire
that pulled us to presence, to
conversation
and candle
where I so wrapped You in
Paper placing
All Thoughts inward, within
Reach of memory
known to
the Heart
Yes, it was there I met
You between
the rain of November
and the warmth of
streets
tea lined
and tasted
bkmackenzie
copyrighted 2013
Magpie Tales
A desire that pulled us to presence...oh that's beautiful...
ReplyDeleteThank you Tess. I really appreciate it...bkm
DeleteSame line attracted me, that desire which pulls together, the two, as if destiny is involved.
ReplyDeleteSimple thughts all through, charmingly written.
LIKE!!!
Good to hear from you Steve. I have been away to long. Thank you...bkm
DeleteYou paint the most amazing scenes in my mind. Just gorgeous!
ReplyDeleteThank you much. Love hearing from you...bkm
Delete... love the form, it propels me .. creates an urgency to unravel the story.
ReplyDeleteThank you there are many stories in all of us. That is why I love poetry... bkm
DeleteReally like that ending!
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Thank you... bkm
DeleteThank you...bkm
ReplyDeleteYour words paint pictures in my mind ... lovely!
ReplyDeleteThank you Katherine ...bkm
DeleteLove the ending,
ReplyDelete"...Yes, it was there I met
You between
the rain of November
and the warmth of
streets
tea lined
and tasted"
Makes me feel the experience in the loveliest of ways :)
That is how I meant it glad you enjoyed it..,bkm
Deletei def like the presence line as well...and then the care of wrapping them in paper
ReplyDeleteThank you Brian...bkm
DeleteBeautifully written with emotion and presence ;) Marvelous!!
ReplyDeleteThank you...bkm
DeleteFrom the title to the close, I felt this poem. Carefully, worded, remembered. Lovely!
ReplyDeleteThank you Margaret ...bkm
Deleteyou paint a beautiful picture... if it rains here in MI this month I'm going out and looking for a man. haha nice write
ReplyDeleteThanks for comments Anthony... Always good to hear from you ...bkm
DeleteAn interesting poem. I try to write poems like yours, but I never know where to put the line breaks. Is their a formula?
ReplyDeleteThank you for your comments no formula just thoughts as they come ...and pause... bkm
DeleteWell, bravo! I loved this and love your own unique style that intrigues and delights. A special write.
ReplyDeleteThank you Lydia ...bkm
DeleteThe poem goes round and round the event slowly taking shape, taking possession of it, writing it down, mailing it. And where there once was nothing -- just random events, rain and a street -- it became "tea lined / and tasted." Great waking and rousing here.
ReplyDeleteAppreciate so much your comments. Thank You...bkm
DeleteI love this tapestry of words woven with passion
ReplyDeleteThank you Katie...bkm
DeleteWho could resist a cloaked tartan? Lovely.
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