Sunday, March 10, 2013

unforgiven





i have delayed sense of forgiveness
pardoned self several times over

but life is found beige there
bland and lacking

diamond head and mackerel
falling from an amber
sky - a bronzen dust devil
occupies my mind
regurgitating
an emerald seascape

i am in love with  my delinquency
love a good sparring
outfitting partner
in adrenalin and outcome

once calmed, i
can not sleep - do i choose
forgiveness? can i forgive
ecstasy its lifeform?

wash me to an open
sea, throw me into the fire
i can not rest
in (non-living) - let me die
unforgiven

bkmackenzie
copyrighted 2013

posted for Magpie Tales


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24 comments:

  1. TruedessaMarch 10, 2013 at 12:50 PM

    Hello,

    I found you poem very moving and the words flowed nicely..enjoyed this one!

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  2. Belva Rae StaplesMarch 10, 2013 at 2:44 PM

    Nice work. I like this lots!

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  3. kaykualaMarch 10, 2013 at 5:54 PM

    wash me to an open
    sea, throw me into the fire
    i can not rest
    in (non-living) - let me die
    unforgiven

    Life can be open to a lot of trials and tribulations so it has been said. It's good to be exposed to such experiences. That's how I read this! Nicely bkm!

    Hank

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    1. signed...bkmMarch 10, 2013 at 8:35 PM

      Yes and we learn and hopefully grow into a stronger and better person...bkm

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  4. TALONMarch 10, 2013 at 8:58 PM

    Forgiveness is such a huge thing...and they say it's more about the person doing the forgiving then the one who transgressed being forgiven...I do know that I have a long memory, though. And sometimes the forgiving is easy and the forgetting is impossible. You got me thinking with this beautiful poem, bkm.

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    1. signed...bkmMarch 11, 2013 at 7:37 AM

      You are so right about the forgiving..the look inside is often the hardest to grasp...thank you...bkm

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  5. The UnknowngnomeMarch 10, 2013 at 10:34 PM

    The Unforgiven Side Effects of Blue

    i am my in love with delinquency
    love a good sparring
    outfitting partner
    in adrenal and outcome

    i long for a sunburnt room
    a bronzen dust devil
    occupies my mind

    wash me to an open sea
    an emerald seascape
    sand in wet places
    a seaform tumbler

    i prefer life bared wide open
    ecstasy its lifeform

    let me die
    under the side effects of blue


    --Please forgive my thoughts on the side effects of you. :)

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    1. signed...bkmMarch 11, 2013 at 7:39 AM

      Bravo Gnome!!! excellent work and may the skies be blue whereever you are today...bkm

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  6. Tess KincaidMarch 11, 2013 at 11:53 AM

    Sometimes it's harder to forgive one's self than others...

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    1. signed...bkmMarch 12, 2013 at 8:03 AM

      True the key is to work at understanding self I believe...thank you ...bkm

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  7. LynMarch 11, 2013 at 1:55 PM

    "Do I chose forgiveness"? overflowing with life...that's good enough!

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  8. Brian MillerMarch 11, 2013 at 3:28 PM

    ha i like the ackowledgement to being in love with delinquency...forgiveness is tricky...at best be often give it tacit thought in giving it only to find we still harbor feelings of resentment...

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    1. signed...bkmMarch 12, 2013 at 8:08 AM

      Delinquency does linger as a youthful love being to predictable does age the mind..to dance one must be on their toes ...bkm

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  9. ninotazizMarch 11, 2013 at 11:22 PM

    You are hard on yourself. Too hard, Barbara.

    (I always think of you as Barbara. I hope I am right...)

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  10. signed...bkmMarch 12, 2013 at 7:59 AM

    You are right my friend. And do not worry I am far from hard on myself ... Quite the opposite ... Blessings...bkm

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  11. Carrie Van HornMarch 13, 2013 at 8:55 AM

    Yes the chaos.....does have it's apeal to the heart and soul and growth.....always love reading your words Bkm....and love your new look! :-)

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  12. annell4March 13, 2013 at 9:38 AM

    I enjoyed each word!

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  13. MargaretMarch 13, 2013 at 6:33 PM

    "Love a good sparring". Ha. So,,,forgiveness can wait a bit? Ha.

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  14. hyperCRYPTICalMarch 14, 2013 at 2:23 PM

    Forgiving is easy - but do we really forgive those times we cannot forget?

    Anna :o]

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  15. LLM CallingMarch 15, 2013 at 10:53 AM

    I'm brought to thoughts of the cleansing forgiveness of water at baptism

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  16. Cait O'ConnorMarch 18, 2013 at 8:18 AM

    I love this poem for its honesty as well as the way it has been beautifully crafted.

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