Monday, March 19, 2012

a human cholera



i found ripe
a human cholera of petrified
hope
called upon, relied 
upon by an informed dilated
world 

the seed is simple, but
infertile and unfounded here
history tells
a fatherland gropes
a mother - cuts and divides

decades layer
rivers bed
visions erode, expose anti-christs
messiahs and bones 
in birthplaces 

ripe and fertile, infertile
thoughts lay waste- write youth
rally - streets
paint and mark a beast, seed

falls from
the ripened - hope buried
proves fertile
in the chaotic

bearing witness
to our social
disease

bkmackenzie
copyrighted 2012

27 comments:

  1. I found this very interesting Barbara. Like your style and presentation, along with the image.

    Also, I resonated to these lines:
    "...rivers bed
    visions erode, expose anti-christs
    messiahs and bones
    in birthplaces..."

    I'm going to be thinking about this for a while!

    Roger ☺

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  2. thanks Roger...I appreciate your comments and support always...bkm

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  3. Great news, the anti christ is exposed ! , that should take some of the wind from his sails

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  4. i had a dream my brother went to the coast to work and died of cholera. Ever wake up crying? strange coincidence.

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  5. Wow this piece hits me hard. So much to think about. Not to be taken lightly, either. I may have to read this again and again.

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    1. Thanks Kristen for your comments - I appreciate you words and hope you enjoyed it...bkm

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  6. Hits that earthy spot this one does. Intensely said.

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  7. Some amazing lines in this Bkm! "hope buried proves fertile in the chaotic".....i love that line! Hope all is going well for you these days....always wonderful to see you at The Mag! :-)

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    1. Carrie - thank you and I too Hope all is good and well with you...I do not get around as much as I used too ...you are for sure one of the sweetest there is out there...bkm

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  8. "...a fatherland gropes a mother" really grabbed me...powerful...

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    1. Tess I actually wrote this before you photo - I felt it really fit the piece...thank you..bkm

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  9. a social decease spreading indeed...i think there were various kinds of social deseases throughout history...some we were able to cure..others we're still suffering from and new ones breaking out all the time..fine write bk...

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  10. falls from
    the ripened - hope buried
    proves fertile
    in the chaotic......what an incredible piece this is.

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    1. Thank you so much Neva..I always love your verse..and take to heart yours hearts and words....bkm

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  11. Ya know bkm, I read lots of poetry I really don't like, just becoming aware of wasted time ..going to start weeding out some, but YOU are a 'keeper'.

    The first and last lines, philosophical, to me. Those thoughts which drip down from lines between answer the question, "How everything IS?"

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    1. Thank You Steve - I always look forward to you comments - thank you for making me a keeper....that means a lot to me...bkm

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  12. hope buried proves fertile...and our social disease both great lines there toward the end in this bk...i like

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    1. Thanks Brian....I am glad you like it..bkm

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  13. A simple shovel can dig a deep hole. I love your ease of presentation and depth of thought. Excellent.

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  14. An intelligent and perceptive poem with great imagery and commendable economy of language.

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  15. Such an intrepid piece of poetry. The images are cutting edge, and the theme very on-point. Remarkable work.

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    1. Thank you Bar None - and thanks for stopping by..bkm

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  17. What an artful, subtle protest. Your polished verse, always elegant, never fails to probe and exact deeper thought. Excellent.

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    1. Gay..thank you for you comments and words...I truly appreciate your thoughts and especially on a piece like this..bkm

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  18. Left me a bit disturbed as usual, so you continue to do a good job at taking me places and making me think.

    I liked the whole fatherland / mother cut trek.

    Very evocative. And a touch otherworldly too.

    xo

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  19. Yes, we do have a social disease. Stark and distressing imagery, seemingly simple, but so many layers (like the hope buried). Brilliant stuff. Thank you.

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