Wednesday, April 20, 2011

round-about



round-about
i met you in the square
the wind blew
and i followed you
there, as 
a tinge of feathered sky - drifted
in-out, in and out the air

i found my heart centered
in the middle
of the square as a Jupiter moon fell
from the sky
handed itself to you and i
an apple you tasted  on my lips

followed you i
to there
past a cities square, shadowing
hair lengths falling through as the
moon into my fingers

and i caught there
a heart, my heart in the square
bouquet of summer, apples green
wrapped in rose, rising from
a springs rest, raining so subtle on the square
round-about
your hands,  my breast

bkmackenzie
copyrighted 2011


15 comments:

  1. Oh, you write some of the most beautiful words to make one dream.

    "In the square bouquet of summer" your words are sweeter than a taste of forbidden apple.

    Besos.

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  2. lovely bk...fun word play with a sensual tip...enjoyed this one much

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  3. Barbara, this is instantly one of my favorites of yours. The unusual structure somehow only enhances the scene you paint. I really like it.

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  4. woww..you never seize to amaze me B..:) loved how it made me feel, lyrical and sweet.

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  5. Excellent - I don't know how you do it.

    Love the imagery, and the connections - nice little mystical paradox...

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  6. I can see the poet with her eyes closed reciting her heart to the sky. The title aptly places love at a center with the lovers going round and round. - Brendan

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  7. I love this poem, Barbara. The uneven structure still flows beautifully. The imagery is wonderful! complex and simple at the same time.

    A truly great poem...one that I have read two times now and going back for a third.

    Lady Nyo

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  8. This is like a delicate waterfall of words. Just lovely!

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  9. thank you ---I had the first few lines for awhile sitting...glad it came together...maybe the excerise of writing a piece daily...helped it to come through....bkm

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  10. I especially like the apples green wrapped in rose. Beautiful. :)

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  11. Stunning imagery. The flow and repetition felt as though it was a form but I'm not sure I recognized it if it is.

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  12. This is perhaps the most exquisite piece of poetry I have yet to read from your pen, bkm.
    I adore every carefully constructed line and tenderly placed word. I wish I had a poem like this in me!

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  13. What beautiful words, bkm. Love in full bloom, and so lovely to read.

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  14. This is just beautiful, BKM. The poem just flows from beginning to end. I can see WHY it would ba a favorite!

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  15. That is so beautiful, Barb.

    Pamela

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