the doorbell rang
as it did before, as it did
at so many homes - during the
Great World War
and the Great World War had taken so
many sons -
"Pray God not mine, not my only one"
and the doorbell rang just
once more - as she pulled her apron
to wring her hands - moving slowly
across the wooden floor, its planks
where he had learned
to walk, and there her heart
had nothing more to say - nothing
more -and her tears gave way
and through the lace curtains
she saw a man
in uniform standing straight, standing tall
and grabbing her
heart - fall, "No" she had
to go, and undid
the latch -
and with turn
of knob - truth hit
her every bone....that the boy she knew
was the man, come home....
bkmackenzie
copyrighted 2011
Posted for Magpie Tales
Seems like a true story - really fits the old house in this pic. Nice one shot bkm.
ReplyDeleteOh this was so wonderful, I loved it.
ReplyDeleteI really wanted this ending. Very sharp emotive poem.
ReplyDeleteA happy ending! Skillfully done.
ReplyDeleteLoved the ending. It was not what I was expecting. Good job.
ReplyDeleteHeart stopping..a noble truth..very well done!
ReplyDeleteNot the ending we expected. Very good, well told.
ReplyDelete(You have "though" where you mean "through", I think, in the first line of the third stanza)
Nicely told... not what one expected from the lead, gentle smiles and more tears at the ending.
ReplyDeleteGreat story ...in every sentences I can feel the old women's fear and love...and liked the happy ending of her son returning home
ReplyDeleteThis struck a chord with me, having sons this age. I'm only too thankful they didn't have to go off to war.
ReplyDeleteoh this is heavy...we just watched the hallmark movie the other week the last valentine...this rings of that...
ReplyDeletethanks I know the poem could have gone either way...at the end...put I was think of a show I watch on Norman Rockwell and so I had to end it this way...bkm
ReplyDeleteBeautiful ending...I thought the worst at first. So glad you put a happy spin on it.
ReplyDeleteOh, I am so glad about the ending, I was bracing myself for the inevitable, just like the mother.
ReplyDeleteWonderful post. You always take me away. I found myself holding my breath, or couldn't breath. So glad to interview on Poets United, loved to learn more about you!
ReplyDeleteOh what a lovely thing you have here! It was perfect. I loved it!
ReplyDeleteI love this so much!!! You captured me at the ending .... lovely lovely!!!!
ReplyDeleteWonderful that was so wonderful. I left out a sigh of total relief!
ReplyDeleteOh you dirty tricker! But I'm glad. :-)
ReplyDeletewhew! Thank goodness! Well done.
ReplyDeleteOh, yes, a perfect ending! Oh, yes!!
ReplyDeleteeerie but indulging. reminds me of a place called Wuthering Heights.
ReplyDeleteIsn't it great when a plan comes together the way it should?! Loved this poem...
ReplyDeleteThe uniformed man at the front step....with dire news or jubilation. Well done.
ReplyDeleteOh my! That choked me a little that did. Happy be!
ReplyDeletevery nice!! so much to this story!! well written too!! nice!
ReplyDeleteOh my!! What a reunion!! I am sooooo happy for them...
ReplyDeleteSince when did I get so emotional??? But your poem certainly filled my eyes with happy tears, bkm...
Throughout the poem, I kept praying that this story end well.. and it did!! Infact, it ended with a new beginning...
A BEAUTIFUL read!!
I wanted a happy ending ... you provided it beautifully!!!
ReplyDeletesweet ending, I like it
ReplyDeletebkm,
ReplyDeleteThanks for the happy ending; too oft' the lady's fears materialize: too often.
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I'm sure you voiced the dread that every soldier's mother feels. I'm so glad the boy came home!
ReplyDeleteTears. This poem is so special. I hope you know that it is.
ReplyDeletevery powerful,
ReplyDeletesome sadness in it.
well done.
I wonder how many mothers went through this. many I expect.
ReplyDeleteA wonderful write
This is a gripper of the heart indeed Bkm....amazingly captured....beautifully written!!!! :-)
ReplyDeleteI really really loved this simple, honest and heart-felt story.
ReplyDeleteWith such love she deserves a happy ending.
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