The value of a rhythm is in the beat, in the sound
with the tapping of the toes
tapping to the soul oozing through the ground
that deep cajun sound...
A horn belting through a dancing town; downing
saintly rhythms; restless souls, walking
New Orleans bound....tapping, tapping
listening to that soul, tapping as it goes; a pearly gate,
golden gates bound rhythm.. souls marching on
golden gates bound rhythm.. souls marching on
born, born to dance,
singing give me all night long
singing give me all night long
tapping, tapping all night long, to a Louisiana horn
til' early morn
and those toes go on tapping, go crying mama
go crying daddy, go crying
go crying daddy, go crying
hal-le-lu-jah all the way home
bkmackenzie
Okay, now I really do need to go watch those last few episodes of Treme I haven't had time for.
ReplyDeleteLove it!
thanks, tatter and lost....i was lost on this prompt for awhile...it had me baffled...but finally something came through...glad you liked it...bkm
ReplyDelete.... and I'm dance, dance, dancing all the night long! Love it!
ReplyDeletethere is so much beat in your magpie - wonderful - my feet are already tapping the rhythm on the floor...
ReplyDeletethank you Helen and Claudia...you Ladies just keeping on dancing and writing...blessings...bkm
ReplyDeleteLovely Magpie with a great sense of rhythm, made me want to dance.
ReplyDeletenice fun take on the prompt and way to be unique...it was not as easy as i originally thought..and now i strangely have ACDC stuck in my head...
ReplyDeleteFantastic! I had trouble with this one too. I like to say something original, not just go with the obvious, and that's what you've done here. I love it! You've rendered it so well that I can hear that music. I especially love the last few lines with the bold type. :-)
ReplyDeleteNice post! New Orleans the center of much to me! You have to call it "love."
ReplyDeletemusical magpie...
ReplyDeletelove the tapping toes idea.
Hal-le-lu-jah!! I love how this Cajun toe-tapping evokes the dripping of the faucet. Nice one!
ReplyDeletebkm,
ReplyDeletetapping toes to the drip drop tapping from the tap.
a top tapping poem bkm.
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Oooh, I enjoyed this Magpie, nice writing! :-)
ReplyDeleteI just had my nails done and they tap really loud on my desk. I tapped the whole time I read your magpie and I loved it. So much soul and so much Rhythm. Bravo!
ReplyDeleteSomebody posted a "Poke Salad Annie" video a while back. This made me want to go listen to it again. Very nice.
ReplyDeletereading this i could truly picture myself in louisiana... oh how i love louisiana! and the smell of a fresh crawfish boil!
ReplyDeleteSo much rhythm to this piece! Wonderful magpie!
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Nice tale. Very upbeat and lively. Brian said he now has AC/DC stuck in his head. I have As the Saints Go Marching In. Go figure. We all see/hear things differently.
ReplyDeleteToes tapping time - in the bath. I can hear it.
ReplyDeleteI've been struggling with this prompt...this was amazing. You had me tapping my feet along with the rhythm of your words. Totally cool.
ReplyDeleteBeautifully lyrical, one is swept along by this poem's mesmerizing and powerful rhythm.
ReplyDeleteReally love this one! It reads beautifully and made me want to snap my fingers as I read and jived along with your words.
ReplyDeleteA wonderfully beautiful song! Love the beat.
ReplyDeleteawesome rhythmn and love the rhyme. i has a great feel, and really does conjure the sensation and beat of good cajun music and Louise Armstrong. I think this prompt was a hard one to pull off, writing anything unique unless you were writing a short story, but you did write a poem that was totally dif. hats off to you, you did an amazing job. enjoyed this one tons.
ReplyDeleteNo BKM, the song title is Dancing in the Dark, not the Bath, silly! Love the life in your word music.
ReplyDeleteThe idea that this was a dance of death scared me a bit..
ReplyDeleteBut I loved the beat and rhythm of your poem!!
It's musical!! Some percussion would have completed the picture!! :) I imagined this, and the your poem and the drums sounded great together !!
Well written, my friend..
Kavita, thank for the comment...just wanted to let you know this is far from a dance of death...it is about the music of Louisana and New Orleans..which is quite full of life....bkm
ReplyDeleteDear bkm,
ReplyDeleteI am a bit lost here. But I can appreciate and feel the rhythm!
This puts the images of a beat in my head to usher the words along I just love it!
ReplyDeleteI just commented on your Magpie after this one (titled "A Tap on the Door") about how I loved the use of the word tap because it put a beat to your poem like when someone tap dances. And then I wandered here next and found this Magpie from last week and it is all about tap dancing. That's just freak weird to me. Love your work, keep it up.
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